Posts by aspasiakor

aspasiakor

Jan 26, 2011

Writing Feedback / 'one and only one' - some people are born with certain talents [3]

well ilaria, its me ASPA again. you need some improvements. first of all, in the intro we rewritte the given issue by changing words and also give our opinion.

second the issue is about if someone can be so good as one other who is a talent by nature. so i believe that your first paragraph is out. also in the second paragraph you should not give an example from your life, besides you are not asked to give an exable.

i hope i helped you.

aspasiakor

Jan 26, 2011

Writing Feedback / IELTS: Post-school qualifications in Australia - men dominated by reaching 90% [2]

hi to everyone, i need every help i can get. i must pass ielts with 7 in each part. HELP ME

The chart below shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999.

The given chart gives information about the percentage between men and women at levels of post-school qualifications in Australia in the duration of 1999.

In skilled vocational diploma, men dominated dramatically by reaching 90% instead of women which were only 10%. The figures changed in undergraduate diplomas. In this section, women prevailed at 70% instead of men whose their figure peaked at 40%. As far as it concerned to bachelors degrees the deference was slightly between two sexes. The number of women was at 55% and the number of men was at 45%. Men prevailed also in postgraduate diploma and master degree. Their numbers were at 70% and 60%. Women figures instead were significant lower almost the half comparably to the men at 30% and 40%.

Overall, the chart illustrates that the proportion of men having a post-school qualification is much bigger than women.

aspasiakor

Jan 26, 2011

Research Papers / The death penalty serve as a deterrent to crime? - research paper guideline [8]

well hi deana. i believe if you go to your search engine especially google and ask it for the death penalty, you will find many information. i recently studied it. i hope i have helped you. wish you luck with your essay.

aspasiakor

Jan 26, 2011

Faq, Help / Why is my topic / thread deleted? [78]

yes it was in a different thread with different subject and i have not posted elsewhere. i guess i have to rewritte it. thanks for your help.

aspasiakor

Jan 26, 2011

Writing Feedback / Gender imbalance in classes is still proved to be acceptable [4]

hi yaiba24. i assume you are preparing foe ielts exams, the same as me. well eventhoght english is not my native language i will try correct some issues i have spotted in your essay.

first of all i find your intro wery good. after i ve noticed that in your first sentence you write:male and female students has positive impacts on students' thinking.what do you mean by that? you dont explain it.

also i believe this sentence has a syntax error.women now have the equal and equitable right in comparison with men's, say, in education.

finally, its not good starting a sentence with WHEN. you should avoid that. you could start like this: in conclusion or on balance or finally or in sum or taking everything into consideration i tend to...

i hope i have helped, ohhhhhhh i find your vocabulary reach, keep it up

aspa

aspasiakor

Jan 26, 2011

Faq, Help / Why is my topic / thread deleted? [78]

to moderators (issue about a deleted thread)

hi to moderators. i want to ask something about my threads. yesterday i wrote two threads but i only see the second, i cant find my first thread. is it my fault? have i done something i shouldn't? please help me

aspasiakor

Jan 26, 2011

Writing Feedback / academic writing task 1- family types living in poverty [4]

ciao ilaria, sono Aspa da grecia. i have to give ielts and i need at least 7 in each part, i know its very difficult so i need every help i can get. thanks

aspasiakor

Jan 25, 2011

Writing Feedback / academic writing task 1- family types living in poverty [4]

The table below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in Australia in 1999.

The given table depicts in percentage the difference in a variety of family types living in poverty in Australia during 1999.

The biggest proportion of family type living in poverty was sole parent at 21% (232000). Moreover single people with no children had also an interested number at 19% (359000). The figures dropped for couples with children at 12% representing 933.000 from the whole number of couples with children. Furthermore, the figure for couple with no children was at 7%.moreover, the family type of single aged person had an imperceptible difference with the aged couples. The first type was at 6% and the second at 4%.

It is substantial to refer that all types of households living in poverty illustrated at 11% almost around 1.800.000 people of the whole population.

Overall, to summarize it is important to underline that the biggest proportion of family type living in poverty was sole parents, but also single with no children had also a significant number.

i really need your help, english is not my native language.

aspasiakor

Jan 25, 2011

Essays / After watching a few films - I need help starting and essay. [3]

hi Papojijo. you could start by writing something like that. the last few decades many films have created to represent childhoones but not all have succeded. the film among the others that really touched me was....

i hope i have helped. aspa

aspasiakor

Jan 25, 2011

Writing Feedback / "No support for the U.S. space program" - CLEP Composition - Product Safety [3]

hi michal, eventhow english is not my native language i will try to share my ideas for your essay.

first of all, i believe that you should not have reffered so comprehensively about Russians and their programm. second i think you should concentrate more to the benefits tha society gains from those programms, such as the development of food industry in order food mainten in the space.

i hope i have helped. aspa