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Joined: Jun 6, 2011
Last Post: Sep 20, 2011
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peiman   
Sep 20, 2011
Undergraduate / My Family (from Saudi Arabia) Background [8]

I was nearly ten, n ot realizing how tragic and irrevocable the event of his death was for my mom and my dad.
After that he came out of the hospital, he was not like before and this incident made me a dependent man on myself and a responsible child to my family.

As result, which made me decided to study abroad to get a certificate that makes me to get the good job. ( try this sentence again plz)

helped him at that time
When he started to think about selling cars, people made fun of him. But a few years later, he became
I hope I can to do half of what he had done in the past. because I know that will be hard for me to do. ( i dont think u have to say this)

Also, he helped our family when they needed anything, and helped many people that I know and it is because he was into helping poor people all the time. He liked helping homeless people in several ways. without feeling tired, I want to be like him helping people that he did not know. My hero is my brother because he was a fighter, helpful and respectful man.

In conclusion, "family" word is a strong word because of this huge meaning behind and in comparison with families of 50 years ago, today's are much different. Inside a Family, you can give and take love and support (dear Mishal, be aware that (verb) and (verb), (adjective) and (adjective), (noun) and (noun) here "LOVE" is a noun but SUPPORT is a verb! plz correct it!) to your children need.

which they need to become mature and responsible adults. try to write better than this sentence
have fun:)
peiman   
Sep 20, 2011
Undergraduate / The political and ethic father of the United States-Why George Washington University? [2]

hi friends. plz help me to make this essay a daZzliNg one. the deadline is approaching! tnx in advance.

Tell us in no more than 500 words what most influenced you to apply to The George Washington University.

The most important factor in me to apply to the George Washington University is limited to two persons who are closely related to George Washington University. Before introducing these two persons, I would like to say some words about myself. I am willing to obtain an admission in the field of Islamic Studies. This desire originates from a conscious choice shaped during my studies in the conservatory and guided me towards a goal one of whose main reasons is intellectual influence. Undoubtedly, this intellectual influence goal is formed by the impressions of the world known persons among whom the two persons in the George Washington University are the most important models. One of them is Seyyed Hossein Nasr (Professor of Islamic Studies at George Washington University) and the other is George Washington (the first President of the United States).

I name Seyyed Hossein Nasr "the intellectual father of Islam and Muslims", and my main reason for this naming is his acceptability and authority in the world of Islam and West society. Certainly, one of the main reasons of his acceptability and authority is his professorship in Islamic Studies in the George Washington University. I am willing to be a student of such an intellectual father.

Considering my familiarity with George Washington's personality and life, I name him "the political and ethic father of the United States" who was the first in the war and peace, politics and ethics and paved the ground for a republic government in USA, where dreams come true. Undoubtedly, the soul of the father of such a land will realize my dream at his university and will accept me as an adopted child in order to prove that the United States of America is still the region to achieve dreams and the protector of the holy freedom fire.

Educational and research facilities as well as students' cultural diversity are my other criteria to accommodate in GWU, but the most important factor that makes me to be a member of GW's family is Seyyed Hossein Nasr and George Washington.
peiman   
Sep 19, 2011
Writing Feedback / Reading fiction is more enjoyable than watching movies? [2]

Dear Tank, please take into consideration the other elements in an IELTS test. You have 20 minutes for a graph, chart or ...(first essay) and 40 minutes for second essay which weights more scores. Managing time is the most important thing! If it is your first time that you want to take an IELTS test, there will be a possibility of being under pressure. So, practice, practice and practice. I recommend you "IELTS Cambridge test series". Familiarize yourself with different common IELTS topics and have good reasons to your idea. Among IELTS topics, TECHNOLOGY and CONSUMERISM are more frequent.

My scores in IELTS test were Listening 6.5 Reading 6.0 Writing 5.5 ( i couldn't manage my time. so, I lost my confident and my reasons were not good enough) Speaking 8.0 Overall 6.5

It's not bad. I mean my applied university accepts 6.5
I prefer not to score ur essay cos I cant. So, I'm really sorry.
wish u an acceptable mark, Tank.
:)
peiman   
Sep 19, 2011
Undergraduate / My Family (from Saudi Arabia) Background [8]

because they were the first who taught me how to love them and how to take my first step in life.
My Family's background and culture have had a huge influence...
My family is from Saudi Arabia where has different backgrounds, lifestyle, food, culture and religious beliefs.
I'm the main person in my family. Family it is also our grandmothers, grandfathers, aunts and uncles.
my family tree has a long history of generations that sometimes is so ancient that we cannot remember the member of it?
I find for myself a lot of interesting things. Unfortunately, I do not know a lot of people in my family branch.
He died because of an accident when I was nearly ten
peiman   
Sep 5, 2011
Undergraduate / "A heart without knowledge.." - what matters most to you? [4]

"A heart without knowledge is like a ruined house, says Prophet Mohammad (PBUH)."
"I wish to resort to a country where there is no sign of Islam at all. Islam is the major barrier for the scientific, artistic, social and political progress. Islam means retardation and slavery." These sentences were my opinions about Islam before entering conservatory. Islam was the major factor opposing me in choosing music as a field of study, so this caused me to hate Islam more than before in an Islamic society.

I can't remember anybody approving of my decision to study music at high school. At the beginning of the educational year 2006-2007, I had chosen music with full diligence, and my family accepted reluctantly creating some impediments. The decision was like a victory as a result of my resistance.

This choice and the victory that I followed motivated me to study music curiously. For this reason, upon entering the conservatory, I caught the conservatory teachers and authorities' attention. Among them, the deputy was the person who caught my attention more than the others and who has had profound effect on me changing my life direction dramatically. Little by little, I became acquainted with his personality, and he was, for me, the first Muslim who had a different and creative view, and who managed to save my lost identity as an Iranian Muslim. Gradually, my hatred towards Islam turned to curiosity and interest.

The most effective experience of my life was shaped in my family relationships. I started these relationships with full refusal and denial, and I managed to achieve acceptability and agreeability in and among my family by changing my thoughts and deeds and this reached a point where I was asked for consultation going through more assiduity in order to create a hearty and rejoicing atmosphere at home. Now, I remember the moment when I opposed all to choose music, but now I have reached a place where my parents consult with me about everyday affairs, and my opinion is important for all. This is my second victory; and I have learnt that people can change.

My interest in music, impression from the deputy of the conservatory, and my impression on my family form the most important aim of my life, and I believe the best way to attain this goal is through immigrating to the West for Islamic Studies and learning about it from a world-known prominent Islamic philosopher educated in the West, Seyed Hossein Nasr (Professor of Islamic studies at George Washington University). When I evaluate my personality, I realize that a great revolution has taken place within me and that it is due to my acquaintance with influential and idealistic people who help and will help me to create an impression on the world in the future. At present, I want to devote all my life to this important topic and build my heart a house as wide as the world for knowledge.

Hi everybody. I need ur opinions about my admission essay plz. how is it?. It must be less than 500 words and it is 493 words now. Thanks in advance.
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