Writing Feedback / "taking a break before starting higher education is a good idea" - IELTS [5]

Subject: In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies.
Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.
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Nowadays, it is an increasingly common trend to take a break before starting university studies. It is not just becoming common among rich students but also in the poor students. Students take a break of year or two, some students travel all around the world during this time, and some choose to take up a job.

Experience gained through travelling to different places, meeting different people and even at job goes long way. It not only enhances the confidence of a student but also makes them independent. Student's who works; tend to gather better financial resources which they can rely on during their university studies. This experience also makes them aware of what they would like to make of their life. They develop broader view and can make a better choice of their future studies or courses.

Taking a break not just has benefits but it also comes with some negative impacts. Once student's starts earning, they might not like to go back to studies where they would lose their financial independence. They might even find it difficult to adapt to education environment. There is also a risk of student never going back to university or higher education. Probably some might take some short term courses instead of proper and complete university education, which will help them to get a better job and salaries. This might only help them in a short run as it is a known fact that to make a reasonable career in longer runs, one needs a proper and higher qualification.

In my view point, I would agree to idea of taking a break before starting higher education. Students who take break, gain lot of benefits by travelling around the places or by working. They tend to contribute more due to their real world experiences which makes them more mature.

Writing Feedback / Children should not be engaged in paid work till they finish their basic schooling [3]

Subject: In many countries children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regrad this as completely wrong while others consider it as a valuable experience, important for learning and taking responsibility. what is your opinion on this?

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In many countries like USA, India kids are engaged in paid work. This has sparked much debate. Some people say that it adds a life time valuable experience to a child which makes them more responsible, while others contend that negative impacts are huge and totally disregard this idea.

When children work for pay during their summer holidays, it keeps them busy in a good way. This work experience teaches them real life experiences and how hard it is to earn the money. This will definitely teach them to respect their hard working parents and their hard earned money. Moreover, as it is said "Empty mind is Devils head" situation will be avoided as they will be engaged during their holidays. When children work in a shop, they will cultivate the habit of keeping things in right order and at right place. This will ensure when they are at home, they will keep their stuff neat and tidy.

On the contrary, if child starts earning at such a tender age, it might turn them into cold hearted and cynical human beings. They will evaluate everything in the perspective of profit and loss, and start associating money with every service, object. Probably once they start earning money, they might get diverted from their studies and may drop out from schools. This would pose a very big risk for a child and their parents. Another big risk, I see is child innocence would be lost as they would get exposed to realities of the world at such a juvenile age. Another biggest threat is it can result in child labour if not properly controlled.

To summarize, in my opinion children should not be engaged in any kind of paid work till they finish their basic schooling. The negative impacts far outweigh the advantages. I would not agree to take even one percent risk when it comes to children as they would form the foundation of the coming generation.

Writing Feedback / "Money should be spend to resolve global issues first, not wasted on space" - ielts [NEW]

Topic: Should governments spend money on space exploration, or should they spend the money on problems here first?

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Governments of many countries are spending money on exploring the space, which is a very costly affair. This has sparked lot of debate. Some say we need to explore the universe while others contend that its not needed and instead same money should be spend on more pressing problems of the world.

Government of US spends maximum of money of different space programs when compared to other countries. Exploring space, trips to moon, all these requires lot of money due to extreme advanced technology, equipments like space crafts and all. Due to these investments only, we have got to know many facts about universe, galaxies, gravity on the moon. This has satisfied curiosity of many scientist and provides a mean to discover different ways to make earth more secure and safe place to live in.

However, there are thousands of pressing issues which needs immediate attention like poverty, uneducation, natural calamities, hunger and diseases. These are the problems in developing countries which can be taken care even if one third of the money spend on space exploration is spend on these major issues. In my opion, money should be spend on these critical issues instead of space exploration. Lets make life better on earth before moving on to the space. Every human being on eath should get basic necessities of the life first. Every person should have access to good education, medical system, good housing and good food.

To summarize, I would conclude that money should be spend to resolve global issues first and then we should think of space exploration. Its not at all justified to ignore these global issues and keep pouring money in space research.