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AU0594   
Dec 12, 2011
Undergraduate / "We're having chickpea stew for dinner!" - Brown RD Supplement [5]

This is a very very rough rough draft and its 30 characters over. Any help will be greatly appreciated. Thanks!!

Sculptor Jacques Lipchitz once said, "Cubism is like standing at a certain point on a mountain and looking around. If you go higher, things will look different; if you go lower, again they will look different. It is a point of view." With this in mind, describe a moment when your perspective changed.

"We're having chickpea stew for dinner!" my mom exclaimed over the phone."Um...no." I weighed my options at the food court. The mall located a block from school made it facile to drop my mom's dull meals in favor of diet cokes and sugar-free cookies. I settled on a fat-free shake. It was the epitome of perfection; every sip resembled a snippet of ethereal bliss. How could my mom devour a gargantuan plate of chickpeas and rice, when she could enjoy a decadent treat equal in calories? When my mom picked me up from the mall, she handed me warm Pyrex. "No thanks." Her face dropped; I sighed. Why couldn't she comprehend that my diet permitted me to be thin and consume my favorite foods simultaneously? The car ride to her new job was awkwardly silent. An eternity later, her new boss, an E.R. M.D. and ivy alumnus, greeted us and showed us our room. She gave directions to my mom; vacuum, mop; prepare homemade food for the kids. She emphasized the word "homemade," explaining that the majority of E.R. patients' visits arise from improper diets. When she left, I wondered into an unending abyss of health books-I'd stumbled upon her library. I scanned one after another, and was astounded at their content. I learned that diet foods were often unhealthier than their conventional forms; fat free foods contain additional fillers, sugar-free foods contain cancer-causing artificial sweeteners. I'd always deemed all things artificial as proof of our radically technologically-advanced society; I'd never pondered the plausibility of their negative consequences. Whereas chickpeas-and a myriad of other foods I'd spitefully rejected -turned out to be nutritional powerhouses. I altered my perspective on foods, realizing that what matters in foods isn't the calorie, fat, or sugar content -but the nutritive value. This inspired my quest to open the eyes of the millions of others out there trying to diet unsuccessfully like I was. The best way to diet is to not diet at all, but to enjoy wholesome foods in moderation.
AU0594   
Dec 13, 2011
Undergraduate / "Ground me." - University Of Virginia RD Supplement Essay [2]

This is a rough draft, please help me revise :)!!
Discuss something you secretly like but pretend not to, or vice versa.
"Ground me." "What?" My mom exclaimed, a perplexed expression on her face. "I don't want to go ice skating, so I need you to ground me," I explained calmly, as if daughters begging their mothers to be grounded wasn't strange. It's not that I wasn't enthusiastic about ice skating in 80 degree "winter" weather in a rink that rivaled a dog bowl in size; I was just more enthusiastic about spending my one "free" Saturday night baking cupcakes and reading my cherished nutrition magazines. Plus, knowing my friends, while skating, they'd have an epiphany that their night would be forever memorable if we partook in additional activities when the rink closed. I shuddered at the thought of arriving home past my curfew and having to deal with my mother's death stare; my inner grandma would much rather retire to bed at an early hour. However, I couldn't admit this to my friends; I couldn't admit that the girl that once wouldn't miss a social outing for the world now prefers to stay home on a SATURDAY NIGHT and spend time bonding with her mother over Martha Stewart activities. I'd be forever teased and called a "loser." "You're grounded," my mom said, excitement beaming from her face. I picked up my phone. "I can't skate today, I'm grounded" I muttered, rolling my eyes. "I envy you ; I'll be stuck at home bored while you're skating." I hanged up and smiled; I'd never felt so much felicity from a "punishment".
AU0594   
Dec 13, 2011
Undergraduate / "We're having chickpea stew for dinner!" - Brown RD Supplement [5]

You go on the common app and it tells you what essays you have to do for each college, and for Brown, you have to do supplement essays regardless of whether your applying for engineering and liberal medicine or not, they just have additional ones for those two.
AU0594   
Dec 16, 2011
Undergraduate / 'intellectual and fun place' - Why Tufts? [4]

range of clubs I can participate in
Tufts seemed to me a place
fun; even tufts traditions
plus point; in tufts I get to
community; Tufts can help me
You seem like you need help differentiating between a comma and a semicolon; that's where most of your mistakes come from.

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