I really like the way you go into the description of biology and it's importance in global change and then go on to say that is the reason for your chosen major. I think that this is very well written.
I have not read these two novels, but your writing on them makes me want to read them. It seems like your leaning toward a thesis about the effects of isolation since that is a theme in both novels. Really well written.
Every person admires someone. She taught me to keep moving even though I'm close to giving up, she believes that there is always something special waiting for me; " You just need to have your faith and believe in yourself."
During my childhood life there are times that I hated her because she would often scold me, but then I realized why she does that. becauseI t's theirher way of showing theirher love and that, it is not usme that theyshe go t mad at, it's what weI did wrong. You could also give an example of how she helped you learn from a mistake and how that ties into why you admire her so much. (am still working on it) Good so far :)
Good ideas here that i expanded on to give an idea of how an essay should flow. begin with your thesis(main idea) then explain your idea, then sum up. I personally don't care for "first of all, second of all" so i edited them out... the next paragraph is sufficient to explaining that you are moving on to your next point. :)
Ok first. this has no coherence whatsoever. It seem like you want to integrate others ideas into your thesis, hence all the quotes, and that's great, but to write an essay, you need to have an opening paragragh that states your thesis. Then the next paragraphs support your thesis and this is a good place to use other's ideas to support your own, as long as you give them credit for their ideas. In your last paragraph you sum up your thesis with a conclusion.
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