Writing Feedback / story: rope [4]

My friends please check my story and tell me how can I make it more beautiful(tell me more and better vocabularies)? and are the tens of verbs correct?

" The Rope"

The story tells about a mountain climber,who wanted to climb the highest mountain.
He began his adventure after many years of experience ,but since he wanted the success just for himself,he decided to climb the mountain alone.

His climbing was going well and everything was ok till the very night that the mishap took place.
That night the moon and the stars were covered by the clouds and the man could not see anything .
As he was climbing only a few feet away from the top of the mountain ,he slipped and fell.
When he was falling with swift speed,the climber could not see anything but black spots, and he went down.
During the falling all of the good and bad scenes of his life came to his mind.He was thinking about how death was getting close.

All of a sudden he felt the rope tied to his waist and pulled him tightly.His body was hanging in the air and only the rope was holding him.

In that moment of stillness he had no other choice but to scream"Help me God"
Suddenly a deep voice came from the sky and said "What do you want me to do?"
"Save me God"
"Do you really think I can help u?"
"Of course I believe you can"
"Then cut the rope tied to your waist"
There was a moment of silence and the man decided to hold on the rope with all his strength.
The next day the climber was found dead and frozen,his body hanging down from the rope and his hands holding the rope only Three feet away from the ground!

Undergraduate / parents and children ('family is the first community') [2]

family is the first community that children step in,and also parents are the first persons that children communicate with them.
children do exactly what they see so parents should be careful about their behavior ,because they set an example to their children.
so with this way parents can influence on children, but when children go to school they meet new people make friends and teir relations are developed so they experience new situations and become familiar with new matters.

if they become friend with honest people their character would promote .
so it's important that parents be aware of their children's relationships and be intimate with them so their children feel relax in their relation with them .