ketalthedon
Nov 22, 2011
Undergraduate / Letter to my room mate about my gaming hobby [6]
thanks alot for the corrections i'll keep them in mind
thanks alot for the corrections i'll keep them in mind
ketalthedon
Nov 19, 2011
Undergraduate / 'when I received my second TOEFL score' - PERSONAL QUALITY,TALENT,EXPERIENCE [3]
this experience sets you apart from other students i think.very few students can pull off this succesfully.GOOD ESSAY.
this experience sets you apart from other students i think.very few students can pull off this succesfully.GOOD ESSAY.
ketalthedon
Nov 19, 2011
Undergraduate / 'you don't want to be late for your first day' - UC PROMPT1 [6]
good essay by the way.the change of tenses and use of dialogue makes it very lively just follow beccalevesque's corrections and you'll be fine.
good essay by the way.the change of tenses and use of dialogue makes it very lively just follow beccalevesque's corrections and you'll be fine.
ketalthedon
Nov 17, 2011
Undergraduate / 'Goals help you plan your next step' - long and short term goals [3]
I think it should be As a high School student setting goals is very important.
Otherwise the essay is good in every aspect and an interesting read.Goodluck
I think it should be As a high School student setting goals is very important.
Otherwise the essay is good in every aspect and an interesting read.Goodluck
ketalthedon
Nov 17, 2011
Undergraduate / 'I'm from Vietnam I have chosen America to be my destination' THE WORLD YOU COME FROM [4]
Good essay i love how you have introduced people to your country at the begiining and then merged the idea with why you want to study in America.Good Essay.
Good essay i love how you have introduced people to your country at the begiining and then merged the idea with why you want to study in America.Good Essay.
ketalthedon
Nov 17, 2011
Graduate / 'knowledge will not acquire you' - SOP, Computer Science [3]
Yeah apart from the few grammatical errors most of which Jennyflower81 mentions above this essay will no doubt impress admission officials.Goodluck.
Yeah apart from the few grammatical errors most of which Jennyflower81 mentions above this essay will no doubt impress admission officials.Goodluck.
ketalthedon
Nov 17, 2011
Undergraduate / Letter to my room mate about my gaming hobby [6]
Write a letter to your room mate that reveals something about you that will help him know you better Stanford university
I love gaming.I play board games like monopoly and ludo but I'm more of a computer gamer.They say a dog is man's best friend well mine is a game controller.Be it Microsoft Sidewinder or Logitech wingman gamepad extreme it just doesn't matter to me.I just stare at the computer screen at times while playing a game and marvel at what lines of code can create so I hope you don't find it wierd.This is one of the main reasons that I'll be pursuing a computer science degree at college.I look foward to meeting you and hope you play games so we can challenge each other at FIFA 12 and AREA 51
Until then,
Kevin.
please be honest. correct and critique as much as you can
Write a letter to your room mate that reveals something about you that will help him know you better Stanford university
I love gaming.I play board games like monopoly and ludo but I'm more of a computer gamer.They say a dog is man's best friend well mine is a game controller.Be it Microsoft Sidewinder or Logitech wingman gamepad extreme it just doesn't matter to me.I just stare at the computer screen at times while playing a game and marvel at what lines of code can create so I hope you don't find it wierd.This is one of the main reasons that I'll be pursuing a computer science degree at college.I look foward to meeting you and hope you play games so we can challenge each other at FIFA 12 and AREA 51
Until then,
Kevin.
please be honest. correct and critique as much as you can
ketalthedon
Nov 17, 2011
Undergraduate / 'with my driver's license in hand' - Common App Prompt A [6]
yeah i do agree with hcodude:you should remove the part about dancing .good essay by the way.
yeah i do agree with hcodude:you should remove the part about dancing .good essay by the way.
