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Posts by JBigelow
Joined: Nov 28, 2011
Last Post: Nov 30, 2011
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JBigelow   
Nov 30, 2011
Undergraduate / 'tears of humiliation and angriness' - UC #2 [2]

A lot of grammar errors. You should ask a peer who's good with grammar to take a pen to a paper print out of your essay. but otherwise, really cool premise!

I was just confused by why you were in the principal's office with your dad and a policeman. You should put an explanation there.
JBigelow   
Nov 28, 2011
Undergraduate / 'Losing my voice and myself in the sea' - USC #2 [6]

Great writing style! I think you need to straight out say somewhere in it though, the word, "architecture," because I wasn't wuite sure if that was what your dreams/aspirations are. Is it?? It's kind of omitted.
JBigelow   
Nov 28, 2011
Undergraduate / Spaghetti and soy sauce UC prompt #1 [4]

I agree, your background has to be connected with your dreams and aspirations. Maybe include what field of study you are interested in pursuing??

Also, it'd be better if you incorporate yourself into those two cultural worlds instead of just talking about your parents
JBigelow   
Nov 28, 2011
Undergraduate / 'the tv show bones' - USC Supplement [2]

I think this is really weak...was the "bones" part kinda silly?? I'm not sure how to explain my interest in the subjects...I just am! haha :P

Describe your academic interests and how you plan to pursue them at USC. Please feel free to address your first- and second-choice major selections.
When asked what my major is going to be, I always replied "undecided," because I couldn't choose between all the fields of study that I am interested in. This is why USC's interdisciplinary major of Cognitive Sciences is perfect for me. It includes the subjects of Psychology, Anthropology, Philosophy, and Neurology, which are the fields of study I have great interest in. One reason I am interested in Cognitive Sciences is that I really like the show "Bones" and I would love to learn about what the characters in the show are experts in. Watching the show also only stimulated my pre-Bones-existing interest in Psychology, Anthropology, Philosophy, and Neurology.

I am also interested in Advertising, and as shown on the activities section of my application, I was and am involved in small, online businesses. I acted as not only the model for the two businesses, one of which is still up and thriving, but I am currently the Director of Publicity and Sales for my assigned region, which currently, given the small scale of the business, remains around Whitney High School. With this experience, I plan to start something of my own branch at USC, where I can expand to new customers. Because Cognitive Sciences does not include Advertising and USC does not have an Advertising program, I plan to minor in Consumer Behavior.
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