Writing Feedback / 'going back to university' - If you could go back to sometime and place in the past [3]

All around the world,almost everyone want to go back in the past to complete dreams and resolve errors which they had committed.If i could to go back,i would like to go to university and study period.That was a time when has various fundemental effects on people life because of many reasons.

My first reason is that this time is very vital years for person to find the right way considering education and work.At this time people can improve their knowledg and experience for having superb future .if i was that time,i would make extra effort and hard work to achieve more improvment in education and being qualified for my beloved job.I had I will so glad if anybody reads my essay and corrects it :)

to struggle with unwanted challenges instead of wasting time to deal up unimportant things.
Another reason for going back to university is there were pleasurable and enjoyable circumstance due to spending time with friends.University is a place where you can establish friendly relashionships with many people who are like your level.It is very important for a person to have friends with similar values and social class.I would like to go to univarsity and find more friends,particulary intimat friend for spending amount of pleased time with eachother.it is thought that university is the best place for finding friends.

Finally,i want to go back for consulting with my parents and the eldery about making crucial decision.Because i find utilizing to their recommends are very practical and useful.Sad to say a large number of people pay less heed to parent's advices.It causes them to commit alot of errors in their life.

In conclusion ,it is very interesting if we could to go back and fulfil our mistakes.I personally want to go to university period and would secure my education and work future.

Writing Feedback / How is your generation different from your parents generation? Differences? [3]

It is my first effort to write essay.please help me to improve my writing for Ielts exam.

It is crystal clear that our generation has very differences with our parents generation in many ways such as living,eating and thinking. in this essay I explore a few differences between two gneration.

One of the most important differences is different perspective view between of them.people who live in the past thought more traditional,such tought had various influences on their life.some people belive that thought of those people was very limited.because they pay more attention to tradition and spent a large amount of time to deal with such convention.for example i cant stand some mother's thought in bump into many things.

This generation has more advantages in technology,technology has been advance order to people reach to plesurable circumstances in their life.although the previous generation have never ever used these technologies such as internet,cellphone,etc,they lived simple and more comfortable.

On the other hand,today food has become easier to prepar than the past.our parents had to spent many time to prepared a traditional food but we prefer doing anything else instead cooking a traditional food.

To conclude it, there are boldly different between our parent's period and our period.I personality belive that the most important of them is the way of thinking.it can make fundemental changes in people's generation