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lambo448   
Dec 26, 2011
Undergraduate / "fixating on the past" + "sheep brains" - NYU Supplements [8]

Why NYU?

Why not NYU! With the plethora of resources, numerous internships opportunities, and the university's excellent vision and leadership, it is difficult to think of the reasons of why I would not apply to NYU. Located in the best city in the world, NYC, NYU has always been my dream school to attend since my freshman year. Listening to the constant bustling of New York traffic, the frequent honking from the impatient taxi drivers, and feeling dwarfed by the city's numerous skyscrapers has made me feel welcomed and at home. More importantly, understanding the rigor and difficulty of NYU has motivated me further to apply to this school for I am always looking for a challenge. I know that NYU will prepare me with my future plans of pursuing a career in medicine, especially with the guidance and instruction of some of the brightest professors in the country such as William Ruddock and Ned Block. Additionally, NYU's President, John Sexton, has allowed me to become even more interested in applying to this prestigious University. Through his unique vision and dedication to NYU, he has made an influential impact on the entire NYU organization. With portal schools ranging from Abu Dhabi to Shanghai, Sexton's vision is a compelling force and an accurate portrayal of my personality and the drive of pursing my goals. "focusing on the future rather than fixating on the past" (sexton)The global opportunities present new dynamics into the future rather than "fixating on the past," (Sexton) is a more than accurate description of myself as a person.

Regardless of whether or not you have an intended major or concentration, please elaborate on an academic area of interest and how you wish to explore it at NYU's campuses in New York or Abu Dhabi or at one of our global academic centers around the world. Please share any activities or experiences you have had that have cultivated your intellectual interests leading you to choose to study at the NYU campus of your choice.

I love sheep brains. Yes, ever since I've taken over my schools biology club in 10th grade, I've been trying to find ways to expand my interest in anatomy and apply them to the schools biology club. With much patience and determination, I finally had the approval of allowing the dissection of sheep brains to be dissected in the club instead of conveying presentations, or playing movies. By holding dissections for three years, I have developed in interest in science, specifically, medicine. With my involvement in bio club, I have expanded my interests in interning at the pinnacle health community center as wee lass attending the national youth leadership forum on medicine. Since then, I have developed my interest in science and narrowed it down to medicine. With this developed interest, I plan on taking advantage of NYU's pre health program as well as taking the "pre-professional medicine" major as well. With over 200 hours of volunteer involvement at Penn state Hershey hospital as well as Pinnacle health community service hospital, I can confidently say that medicine is my future career and will take advantage of the resources that apply to it. Then, I have accumulated a breadth of experience in medicine which range from my internship at pinnacle health hospital all the way to running my schools biology club. I plan on taking advantage of NYUs numerous internships and opportunities at the college of arts and sciences.

What intrigues you? Tell us about one work of art, scientific achievement, piece of literature, method of communication, or place in the world (a film, book, performance, website, event, location, etc.), and explain its significance to you.

"Five more minutes..." I lethargically said to my mother. Some days, getting out of bed seems like futile task. Other days, getting out of bed puts me in a great mood to start the day. The event of waking up in the morning greatly intrigues me. This is a simple routine exercise, but when dissected, portrays a unique theology of my own personality and motives. For example, the quote "early to bed, early to rise" couldn't have been more accurate. What you do in the past reflects what happens to you in the future. This is event is significant to me because it defines some of the aspects of my motivation and myself. I know that what I do in the past will affect my future so in order to prevent an unsatisfying future, I would put 100% effort in the present to achieve the desired outcome, a bright future. Similarly, on days when I wake up grouchy and discontent, I would basically invest my attitude and time into sleeping earlier that day in order to wake up easier the next morning. If, for some instance, I had stayed up all night doing elaborate project or used my time inefficiently, it would affect my future by causing me to wake up later or making it tougher to wake up. In other words, investing will power to the time you want to go to sleep depends on the time you wake up.

I need a lot of help...
THANKS IN ADVANCE
lambo448   
Dec 25, 2011
Undergraduate / 'The office workers' - Common App EC essay about debate [11]

This is great! If you need to shorten it, try changing "pounds" to "lbs." as a start. Then if your really daring, I would suggest changing the sentence "I found a place where it was encouraged to say all the things i thought ," to "I found an environment in which i could speak my mind..."
lambo448   
Dec 25, 2011
Undergraduate / 'writing lists' - one thing that I love doing for absolutely no reason [9]

This is great! So original! I would take a look at the sentence "My favorite kinds of list to write, though, are the lists of things I want to do for enjoyment," Instead, i would replace " My favorite kinds of list to write" to "However, my most favorite kind of list to write are lists of things i want to do for enjoyment." Otherwise stellar mini essay!
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