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Dec 28, 2011
Undergraduate / 'University is an important phase in life' - Dear Roommate - Babson Prompt [4]

Write a letter to your first-year roommate at Babson. Tell him/her what it will be like to live with you, why you chose Babson and what you are looking forward to most in college. There is no word count requirement for this letter.

Dear roommate,
I don't believe in fate. I believe in humans shaping their own futures. Therefore it was not fate that led me and you to be roommates. It was not fate that both of us are going to Babson. Both of us have dedicated years of hard work and choose to attend this school. I hope we can get to know each other better and continue working hard towards our futures.

My name is Vivian Ho and I cannot convey how thrilled I am about this new life I'm starting at Babson with you. I am Taiwanese, but I have been traveling around the world for most of my life due to my father's work; he is a diplomat. My adventures abroad include a five year stay in Hong Kong, a short spell in Nicaragua for three years, and a Latin-American experience in Panama for six. Some people find it challenging to make friends when constantly changing schools and moving around, but I have enjoyed making close friends in each place I went. Along with making new friends, I also learn their histories, cultures, languages; I became fluent in Mandarin, English, and Spanish. My friends are from many different countries and speak many different languages. I believe no matter what people's interests or nationalities are, they can form a lasting friendship. I would love to share my culture with you and get to know yours. Also, I cannot wait to share my thoughts on business with you. After all, merging ideas and innovating possibilities can be really fun.

I'm really looking forward to dorm life with you. Have you ever lived on your own before? I spent my junior year in high school living in the dorm. I am pretty independent and like to keep my place organized and clean. I have roomed with some rather messy roommates before so I understand the pain of annoying roommates, which is why I won't ever leave my clothes on the floor or stack the trash next to the door. I am also a pretty decent cook. Have you heard of bubble tea or scallion pancake before? They're some of Taiwan's most famous foods and I can make some for some of our more rigorous nights studying. I love having fun, but I would never let it interfere with my academic life. Missing classes or failing courses is one of the aspects of college I think I will not enjoy. After all, school itself is fun, you get to learn and hang out with your friends at the same time.

I still enjoy school, leading many of my classmates to marvel at my apparently otherworldly tastes. So I do not think I will have a problem with college. Babson, in particular, I think I will really enjoy. Various reasons prompted me to apply for Babson, including how much my economics professor recommends it and the amazing city it is located in. However, the main attraction is its entrepreneurship program. Babson's entrepreneurship has been ranked number one for the past eighteen years. Its specially designed curriculum will allow me to work on my business career in depth. Unlike other colleges, where I would only be able to read about the subject for two years before beginning to work with it, Babson will allow me to immerse myself with practical business from day one. I could create and run my own business projects. I am a practical person who values the importance of learning through hands on experience. Babson's approach will allow me to learn from the deep root to the top, which fits my concept that in order to succeed at anything, one should start from the core. How can skyscrapers remain high and stable without firm groundwork? Babson will lay my foundations and help me soar.

University is an important phase in life when I make life long friends and build my future. I believe our first year at Babson together will be great. We both came here for a fine business education to pursue our dreams; being able to enjoy it with people like ourselves, who have similar motivation and aspiration are just an added bonus. While Babson is the triple layer cake for dessert, getting to know and meet each other will be the cherry on top.
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Dec 28, 2011
Undergraduate / When You Didn't Exist (M&Ms and Solipsism) - Common App Essay [8]

Sophisticated and well organized. I would suggest explain more of the "sacrifice my life any further in striving to find it" part, such as: are you going to work hard or become a doctor? Show a bit of aspiration to lighten this up!

Also, in your third paragraph, describe some of the "things to learn". Make the essay a bit more specific so the colleges get to know you! :)
teehehe   
Dec 28, 2011
Undergraduate / 'My iPod' - Brown: Pick a Question That Will Provide the Most Insight [2]

Personal yet sophisticated. Good job on adding the "stanford and piano lessons" part that can let the schools really get to know you. I would suggest to add more details in the "french music" part. Don't let them think that because you like french music equals you love foreign countries' culture. You can add in something like "the syntax and pronunciation trigger my interest for foreign cultures".

Don't get me wrong, i love the essay, but a bit more details at the end can make the essay stronger. Good luck!
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