PrspectivStudnt
Jan 1, 2012
Undergraduate / 'Mexican culture' - Yale/ Harvard supplement [15]
I reread your essay twice and i couldn't find much errors with it other than minute ones. "My identity was clouded up by the two different cultures." It might sound better if it read like this "My identity was clouded by these two different cultures." Also, I think you can fix this sentence up a tad bit "The changes I have experience in life have been climax to this point of my life where my self-identity seems clear." But you did a fine job at answering this prompt which seems quite difficult. Good luck and thanks for the help.
I reread your essay twice and i couldn't find much errors with it other than minute ones. "My identity was clouded up by the two different cultures." It might sound better if it read like this "My identity was clouded by these two different cultures." Also, I think you can fix this sentence up a tad bit "The changes I have experience in life have been climax to this point of my life where my self-identity seems clear." But you did a fine job at answering this prompt which seems quite difficult. Good luck and thanks for the help.