Writing Feedback / 'the quantities of goods transported in the UK between1974 and 2002' - writing IELTS [2]

here is the requirement:

The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevent.
And, this is my job:

The illustration gives information about four different modes of transport in quantities of its goods transported form 1974 to 2002, the four transports are by road, water, rail, and pipeline.

In general, there is an upward trend during such 28-year period.

The amount of goods shipped by road and pipeline generate a simillar movement over the time given. However, the number caused by road shipment almost fouth time and above higher than by pipeline did in the past, that is nearly 100 million tonnes and 25 millions in 2002, and 70 millions in 1974 comparing with 7 millions, respectively.

Besides, over 28 years of such record, it shows an increase of 25 million tonnes of goods transported by water, from 38 million (in 1974) to 63 million (in 2002). Meanwhile, there is a small gap changing in this number generated by rail, olu 3 millions resulted giving between 38 and 41 million spreading over this time.

To sum up, during such period, goods transportd by road is alway an outstanding method for shipment than the three othes, and it is forecast to go up faster in the future. The other transports seem to be ramain lower and also keep a slow speed of increasing in the next years to come.

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Writing Feedback / 'Making cement, limestone and clay' - the IELTS Exam [5]

The exam requires to write at least 150 words about 2 processes of producing Cement and concrete for building purpose based on two pictures discrbring it.

Here is my work.

These two pictures below display the processes of making cement and how to produce concrete from cement for building purpose.

Limestone and clay are the first materials introducing to the process of cement production. They are pass through a crusher to become powder and this powder goes into a mixer after that. Next, the mixture goes into a rotating heater where it works with heat. Afterwawrds, the products of this step pass to a grinder and then becoming the cement production. The last step of this procession is to pack in to bags.

The beside picture is ablout a concrete production process which we combine 15% of cement, 10% of water, 25% of sand and 50% of small stones or so-called gravel. All of these materials are in a concrete mixer mixing for a time and then comming out for the building purpose.

Those two picture summaring the processes to produce cement and concrete. The difference between them is the appearence of heat in the cement production.

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