Writing Feedback / 'the daily demand of electricity in summer'; IELTS [NEW]

The line chart above illustrates the different amount of electricity demanded daily in England in winter and summer and the pie chart tells us the different ways were used for in every England home.It is easy to see the rate of consumption in winter is higher than in summer.

it is noticeable that the daily demand of electricity in sumer is between 10,000 and 20,000 units, the summit is in the noon and at night ,the lowest point is in the moring around 8 am.on the contrast,In winter, the daily demand of electricity is above 30,000 unites . the high point are at night and in the early moringand the lowest point is in the morning around 7am.

From the pie chart ,we can see 52.5% of the electricity was used i heating rooms and water,17.5% of electricity was used for ovens,kettles,washing machines.the rate of consumption of electricity in lighting ,TV,radio is the same to vacum cleaners ,food mixers,electric tools is 15% .

In total,the marjority of electricity was used for heating rooms and water,that is the reason the daily demand of electricity in winter is higher than in summer.

Writing Feedback / 'transportation of fruits and vegetables by air' - Essay [NEW]

Some people believe that we should not use air transportation to carry fruits and vegetables. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The statistics shows that more and more air flights were used for transportation of fruits and vegetables. Unveiling this aroused public concerns and sparked a heated debate about whether we should use air flights to transport fruits and vegetables. I would like to illustrate my ideals as follows:

First, If we do not choose air plan to transfer fruits and vegetables instead of by trains or boats, obviously, it would take a long time to transport from on place to another place and fruits and vegetables are easily to get bad consequently, specially in summer, the high temperature decay these products easily. on the contrast, if we choose the air transportation, we will not face this problem as the air transportation will take a short time to get the destination and there are air conditioner in the airplanes to low down the temperature to keep fruits and vegetables fresh.

Besides, some fruits or vegetables were produced only in the tropical region, such as lichi, mango,etc.if we use air plan to transport them ,all the people in the world can share these products almost at the same time, we can stay at home to enjoy all the fruits and vegetables in the world. the whole world is a big chain supermarket. We do not need to go abroad for a special fruit, we do not need to spend a huge travel fee to get some special vegetables or fruits.

From the above opinion, we can see it is a good ideal to use airplanes to transport fruits and vegetables. save time, save money.

Writing Feedback / Many animals and plants are dying out today. What are the causes and solutions [2]

Many animals and plants are dying out today. What are the causes and what are your solutions

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The statistics shows that species of animals and plants are decreasing gradually, Unveiling this report has aroused public concerns and has sparked a heated debate about the causes and solutions. There are lots of reasons and ways to solve this problem , I put my ideals as follows:

First, let us talk about deforestation and the discharge of carbon dioxide, some businessman use the wood for throwaway chopsticks and tissues; this is a huge waste of natural resource. Also with the development of the technology, the combustion of the minerals, petroleum, natural gas and coal were increasing which wreak the natural resource and cause the dying of the plants. The law enforcement department should elevate the public awareness of the preserving of the environment. and make some harsh steps to punish people who disobey the rules.

Also people use the animals for animal experiment and medical research. What is more, some people poach to eat the meat of the animal or to sell it to the restaurant, these actions are cruel and inhumane, we have to make harsh measures to forbid these activities, such as go to jail and pay a fine. Animals are companions of the human, and we should preserve animals instead of killing them.

Last but not least, the greenhouse effect breaks the balance of the ecosystem, and the animals and plants can not live in the unstable environment .So we should decrease the pollution of the air and protect the ecological equilibrium.

In conclusion, the best way to protect the animals and plants is to decrease the deforestation and the pollution.

Writing Feedback / Dealing with first-time offenders and criminals - essay [3]

Some people think criminals should get longer terms in prison while others think there are others ways to reduce the crime rate. Discuss

Nowdays,with the development of the technology,it is easy for us to find the crime rate is growing.this trend arouse public concern.Some people think criminals should get longer time in jail .But others think there are others ways to reduce the crime rate,so they do not need to stay in the prison for a long time.For my opinion,I think it depends the crime. like it is a heinous crime or misdemeanour and this person is a first-time offender or repeat criminal.

First,if the offender commits a petty crime,we should be lenient and give a chance to the criminal to reform himself/herself.the law enforcement agencies should give the culprit more knowleage instead of staying in jail,a misdemeanour was closed in the cell may lead to the trauma and resent society,as this offender was a law-abiding citizens who broke the law accidently.we just need them to know they disobeyed the law and it was wrong,they need to admit their fault and would like to reform themself.

Secondly, if this person is a hardened criminal, it means this offender is a premeditated crime and its criminal tendency is high, it is impossible for the crimes to correct himself/herself.The law enforcement agencies should put the crimes in the cell for a long time and educate criminals until they are sure the offenders were realized their crime and would like to change themself turely,also the law enforcement agencies should obseve these crimes in the cell for a long time,if the crimes's performance is good and there is not any crime happened again then let them go to a special place to study.the purpose of this acting is to avoid revert to crime.

Thirdly,if the offender is a repeat criminal,no matter the crime is a heinous crime or a misdemeanour,the law enforcement agencies should put the offender in the prison for a long time to make sure a safe society,or else the recidivism rate is high because they know they do not need to stay in the cell they will be free in a short time.

All in all,the law enforcement agencies should deal these crimes by different way .First-time offender should be givem more chance to regret themself and the repeat-crime should be educated for a longer time.