Writing Feedback / IELTS writing: moving big companies out of cities [5]

Topic: Some people think the government should move the big companies and factories in cities to the countryside. To what extent do you agree?

Due to the increased urbanization, there appears a bunch of problems which have already been heated social issues. Some people have noticed that there are many big companies and factories in the city and they believe that moving those big companies and factories into countryside could be a good way to solve many of the city-problems, such as traffic issues and housing problems. However, I hold an opposite opinion to them and I will explain it as below.

Cities have much more advantages than countryside. There are more cinemas, restaurants and shopping malls in cities, let alone better education and health care. Living in cities makes life more convenient and enjoyable. Thus not everyone is willing to move to countryside in spite of their companies' moving. How? They have got cars, which transfer them easily between work and home. Therefore, the pressure of traffic will not be released due to such solution. Never the less, since there will be still numerous people choosing living in cities, there will be large demand of houses. As for the available empty places spared by the big companies, the newest small companies will take good care of them-with the realization of the benefits that run a business in cities will bring to them. In other words, situation of housing will not be improved much.

Besides, there will be more problems if big companies and factories move out. Where there are big companies and factories, there will be cities sooner or later. So, instead of regarding this as moving to countryside, it is more like an urban sprawl. Consequently, countryside is to be disappearing. What's more, industrial pollution is not an easily mended problem.

In conclusion, moving big companies and factories out of cities is never a final solution. It tackles no problem but caused lots of them. Just imagine. The traffic is still terrible, houses are still inadequate and there is no more scenic countryside. We should look into other ways to solve the problems.

Writing Feedback / IELTS; The media should stop reporting detailes of crimes reports [2]

Topic: The media should stop reporting details of crimes to the public. To what extent do you agree?
here's my essay below:

Nowadays, detailed reports of crimes in media have aroused public concern largely. Large amount of people suggest that detailing crimes should be banned in consideration of its negative social influence. However I hold an opposite opinion towards them. And I will explain it as below.

It has been widely acknowledged that detailed reports of crimes would give people who tend to commit crimes cheap lessons in such an easy way. But media reports are never the only choice for a criminal to design his plans. As there is a will, there are ways to get information, for example by novels and internet. In another words, banning of detailed reports of crimes cannot ban criminals from collecting information. Meanwhile, bringing out those details helps common people focus on criminal information much in daily life, thus it makes media the most common way to get some education, for example not to hang out late alone.

Besides, there is a worry about hurting victims psychologically which is so not right to me. It is true that it can be really painful to face the miserable experiences, but a superficial calm by evading the truth is never a good therapy. A real relieve should be real peace in heart which requires courage and strength. Dare to tell the truth, overcome the fear and help others. This is the right thing to do.

Also, some people think that there will be unnecessary exaggerations about those details, in that media people want to boost sale. Hence the trueness is dubious. It may be true that the press will describe a common room as a scary place, but there is no such exaggeration as making a rob into a murder. This is a lie instead of a mere exaggeration. My point is that moderate exaggerations hurt nobody. The ones that twist truth are mistakes, which are always condemned in media industry and should not appear much.

In conclusion, I strongly support that media should report details of crimes. Those reports only have a limited negative social influence however the benefit for arousing public self-protection awareness outweighs much.