Writing Feedback / essay "to study history and literature rather than to study science and math" [3]

Please, criticize my essay. I am preparing for an exam by myself. Any help would be appreciated. Thanks in advance

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more important for students to study history and literature than it is for them to study science and mathematics. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

Nowadays students can choose what type of academics they want to learn. Some of them prefer to develop their knowledge in history and literature. However others want to study science and math rather than the humanitarian realm. The issue what field of science is more important is a very controversial one. Personally, I disagree with the statement and I think that both options have its advantages. From my point, each student has to learn history, literature as well as science and math on basic level. But they can advance in certain knowledge afterwards according to their own talents and preferences. In the following paragraphs I will mention reasons of my opinion.

First of all, learning history and literature extend our awareness of humankind past and cultural development. Students have to know about their ancestors and their cultural achievements. Moreover, literature introduces them to moral and ethical examples of people behavior as far as a spiritual and humanistic progress. Classical literature masterpieces inspire us to think over main values of humankind.

Second of all, our contemporary world develops due to the progress of science and math. There is no business that can work without calculation and analysis. That is why students should not avoid learning basic knowledge in science and math because it might be helpful in their future success in business. We cannot imagine the modern life without technologies which embrace all parts of our lives. It would be better to be aware of technological principles which are based on science and math.

Thirdly, I think that students would like to develop their intellect and extend their knowledge because the contemporary progress needs intelligent people who are able to accomplish different kind of tasks at the same time and succeed in different social aims. People who have extended minds and high intelligence are more efficient in life and in business. They easy can find their knowledge application and adapt to changing society needs.

In conclusion, the statement that history and literature are more important than science and mathematics is somehow senseless. I believe that each of them bring benefits in our lives. Therefore each of those fields must be studied in schools because in our modern society we have to know about the humankind history and cultural achievements as well as the progress in science and mathematics.

Writing Feedback / 'careful with ads' - advertising encourages us to buy things we really do not need [2]

Hello everybody! I am from Russia and I am preparing for IELTS by myself. I would appreciate your help. Please, point out my serious mistakes. Thanks in advance!

Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things we do not need. However, others believe that advertisements provide us with information about new goods. This issue is a very controversial and it is still open for debates. Personally, I believe that advertising is not very helpful and brings some mess in human life. I base my opinion on the following points.

First of all, I have to say that we have too much advertising on TV and mass media in nowadays. I overload our mind and attention. We look around and advertising is everywhere. From my viewpoint, it is very annoying. Business companies try to attract our attention to their products and perhaps it really works and most of people are encouraged to buy all of those items. But I think that we do not need so many products for surviving in the world. For example luxuries, I do not believe that we need to buy so many luxury things to be happy and to have full life. Advertising tempts people to buy beautiful jewelries and ones are ready to waste most of their savings for such useless things.

Second of all, I guess young and inexperienced in life people who are so easier influenced by tricks of advertising tend to waste their money for things which they really do not need. When they watch TV that filled with commercials every thirty minutes they are getting appealed to the beautiful image of the product and they are not interested to figure out whether they really need it or not. The immediate impulse encourages desire to obtain the item.

Thirdly, the commercial does not maintain the true information about the product. The main purpose of adverts is to sell as much as possible and it does not care about providing people with the complete information of the goods that could deter potential buyers. In result, we are involved in buying things which might be useless or even harmful.

In conclusion, I want to notice that when we see commercials we have to be careful with our fleeting intention to buy all those things which are advertised there. It is better to learn more information about the product and to think over the real needs. I tend to think that we do not really have to buy so many things which we are encouraged by advertising.