sue2013kim
Jul 31, 2012
Scholarship / Registered Nurse became my new goal; SCHOLARSHIP/ Primary goal? [8]
Nice job! It's not bad but it is kind of difficult to understand your logic. You start by talking about you're fear of working at a hospital and you overcoming this fear. And then you go on explaining that you need to have an education to achieve your goal. But the prompt is asking about your primary goal for going to school, yet you focus more on overcoming your fear. I would suggest explaining why education is necessary more.
Nice job! It's not bad but it is kind of difficult to understand your logic. You start by talking about you're fear of working at a hospital and you overcoming this fear. And then you go on explaining that you need to have an education to achieve your goal. But the prompt is asking about your primary goal for going to school, yet you focus more on overcoming your fear. I would suggest explaining why education is necessary more.