Undergraduate / UPenn Supplement Essay - innovation matters [2]

I need desperate help on this one!

Question:Describe the courses of study and the unique characteristics of the University of Pennsylvania that most interest you. Why do these interests make you a good match for Penn?

Applying for: Huntsman Program of International Studies and Business

Essay:
Ben Franklin knew that innovation mattered when he created University of Pennsylvania in 1740 as America's first university. It is a history lesson remembered, as innovation matters even more now today than ever. With my childhood dream of being a successful businesswoman, I dare say that scarcity is everything in the field of business. Differences of even the smallest proportions are what separate success from failure. Since University of Pennsylvania's long-term goal has been to remain unique and creative from other schools, it is the school that can assure me opportunities to exert my full academic potential and to develop keener entrepreneurial abilities.

Looking at Penn, I take extreme interest in the Huntsman Program in International Studies and Business. Its well-rounded program consists of a standard curriculum that embodies foreign language proficiency, a business foundation, and international affairs studies, all necessary qualities of an effective 21st century entrepreneur. University of Pennsylvania does not hold back on opportunities to further enhance the experiences and resumes of its students: students in the program are required to study abroad for at least one semester at another university in the area of the world their target language is spoken. This assures that students who graduate Penn are not only equipped with the basic knowledge of economics, finance, and pure business skills, but they are also fully exposed to the diversity and complexity of real-life international business. Business is all about cooperation. Tolerance to a different culture and insight is essential to any alliance. I hope that by participating in this accelerated program that I can develop the necessary human capital to invest back my talents into society and provide more utility to the world.

I don't know if I answered the question correctly. Creative ideas and props are wanted! Thanks!

Undergraduate / Northwestern Supplement (choice of school colors) [6]

Hey Everyone, I've been having difficulties really narrowing down my essay on this question.

The Question is: What are the unique qualities of Northwestern - and of the specific undergraduate school to which you are applying - that make you want to attend the University? In what ways do you hope to take advantage of the qualities you have identified?

My essay is below:
A glance at the color purple and I instantly recognize the uniqueness in Northwestern University's choice of school colors. While most schools often go with the usual hues of blue, orange, green, gold, and red, Northwestern clearly stands out among them with its vibrant contrast of white and purple. Only a school emboldened already by diversity and originality can take up such a claim.

Northwestern University is "IT", the school that is willing to take a bold chance and be different. (Hence why their school color's purple.) The school offers 15 interdisciplinary programs to students covering minors, majors, and esteemed programs that can help students excel at their disciplines. Faculties associated with Northwestern's esteemed graduate program such as Kellogg School of Management offer a variety of courses in accounting, finance, and marketing specifically designed for Weinberg students. The Weinberg College of Arts and Sciences (WCAS) encourage students to be unique. It is a school that understands that differences of even the smallest proportions are what separate success from failure. Scarcity is everything in my intended major of business, so why not develop my abilities at a school whose specialty is breeding innovation? Such subtly designed business training programs perfectly fit my expectations.

Northwestern is also the school where unity and cooperation are ultimate musts for attending students. Its fraternity and sorority organizations are promising areas where such qualities can thrive. I jump for an opportunity to interact more fervently with other peoples with similar and different interests because I can broaden my global perspective by doing so in my sophomore year. With chances like these, why should I not rush to grasp it?

As for developing a prominent social life, I hardly find that a problem. Northwestern University is only 12 miles away from downtown Chicago, the city of tall skyscrapers, busy stores, and long avenues occupied daily by thousands of people from all over the world. Diversity takes its best form in the town of Chicago with all of its exceptional landmarks and menus. More importantly, Chicago is a major financial center with the second largest central business district in the United States and is the headquarters of the Federal Reserve Bank of Chicago. The Chicago Stock Exchange is also located there. Opportunities for market internships and community service are abundant and pertinent for the next generation of American entrepreneurs. In effect, Northwestern provides its student body with a chance at real marketing, advertising, and business campaigning. A colorful resume is vital for any career-seeker. With a better preparation for the future, the rate of success is inevitably higher. Therefore, I turn my head towards Northwestern, trusting that four life-changing years at the school is definitely worth the investment.

Can anyone help me? My main problems are: Did I focus enough on Northwestern? Are there any parts of the essay that is too ambiguous about my stand on a position?

Can anyone provide any advice or source where I can get a more personal account of the school?

Thanks!