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Posts by nightmare2k
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nightmare2k   
Mar 2, 2014
Writing Feedback / TOEFL; Words Speak Louder Than Words [5]

sense of trust

sense of truth

I don't see what role that "laziness" plays here. You should make your idea more clearly, such as "Speaking is meaningless without following action (expand this idea)"

One thing definitively can be seen here is repetition. Keep paraphrasing.

"Last but not least", your title is wrong.
nightmare2k   
Feb 28, 2014
Writing Feedback / What is your approach to problem-solving, and how does it work for you? [4]

There are always plenty of people who face your problems and their solutions to encounter it.

I think you should change to: "plenty of people face the same problems with you"

who care enough

They always care "enough". Remove it.

to deal with your problems

I think it is generally "the problem"

Your writings is good, though. One bad point here is that there are so much repetitions. Paraphrasing is the solution.
nightmare2k   
Feb 28, 2014
Writing Feedback / IELTS, Change look is good or not? [4]

Moreover, high amount of money spent on cosmetics instead of education and healthy life style.

This is a fragment.
Your writing has a good introduction. However, the following parts are somehow inflexible. Along with several wrong grammar points is the lack of support ideas. You should add some of them.
nightmare2k   
Feb 27, 2014
Writing Feedback / IELTS Writing Task 2 : About Overweight [2]

In your first paragraph you should make it clear what you want to say in the following paragraph, in my opinion.
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