Posts by nightmare2k
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TOEFL; Words Speak Louder Than Words [5]
sense of trust
sense of truth
I don't see what role that "laziness" plays here. You should make your idea more clearly, such as "Speaking is meaningless without following action (expand this idea)"
One thing definitively can be seen here is repetition. Keep paraphrasing.
"Last but not least", your title is wrong.
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IELTS TASK 2: distance education to classroom-based education ? [4]
I totally agree with kridUessay. Your essay is very good if something are added, such as supporting ideas.
This argument will be proven by looking at how the face-to-face interact and the groups are essential in the development of the students.
=> groups, which are ...
One thing to say that you used many wrong articles. Go get rid of it. Have fun.
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What is your approach to problem-solving, and how does it work for you? [4]
There are always plenty of people who face your problems and their solutions to encounter it.
I think you should change to: "plenty of people face the same problems with you"
who care enough
They always care "enough". Remove it.
to deal with your problems
I think it is generally "the problem"
Your writings is good, though. One bad point here is that there are so much repetitions. Paraphrasing is the solution.
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IELTS, Change look is good or not? [4]
Moreover, high amount of money spent on cosmetics instead of education and healthy life style.
This is a fragment.
Your writing has a good introduction. However, the following parts are somehow inflexible. Along with several wrong grammar points is the lack of support ideas. You should add some of them.
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