lizziemando
Sep 6, 2012
Student Talk / 'Composing mail' - written skill problem [12]
I would be glad to help if you posted it on here :)
I would be glad to help if you posted it on here :)
lizziemando
Sep 6, 2012
Scholarship / Family's attention and children behavior - scholarship essay [8]
Just work a little on your grammar. The rest is great.
Just work a little on your grammar. The rest is great.
lizziemando
Sep 6, 2012
Undergraduate / 'Lessons from my friend' - 12TH GRADE COLLEGE ESSAY CHECK [7]
No you're not being rude at all, I totally understand. I realized I need to write more about how he impacted me rather than making it all about how great he is. Thanks a lot anyway! And Good Luck with your essay! :)
No you're not being rude at all, I totally understand. I realized I need to write more about how he impacted me rather than making it all about how great he is. Thanks a lot anyway! And Good Luck with your essay! :)
lizziemando
Sep 5, 2012
Undergraduate / 'Lessons from my friend' - 12TH GRADE COLLEGE ESSAY CHECK [7]
Thanks! I'm actually not applying yet, it is a practice. The essay has to be at least 350 words. And yeah I figured it was a little too vague but didn't know if it wouldve gotten too detailed and off topic if I talked further into my family issues. Because I tend to do that.
Thanks! I'm actually not applying yet, it is a practice. The essay has to be at least 350 words. And yeah I figured it was a little too vague but didn't know if it wouldve gotten too detailed and off topic if I talked further into my family issues. Because I tend to do that.
lizziemando
Sep 5, 2012
Undergraduate / 'I wanted to go BIG' - UT admission essay [11]
This is a really well written essay. Definetly grabbed the readers attention. Great job!
This is a really well written essay. Definetly grabbed the readers attention. Great job!
lizziemando
Sep 5, 2012
Undergraduate / 'With my older brother' - Texas State Admissions [3]
The overall message of this essay is great. It grasps the readers attention when you talk about how your brother was become a druggie and all. It was attention grabbing and great.
The overall message of this essay is great. It grasps the readers attention when you talk about how your brother was become a druggie and all. It was attention grabbing and great.
lizziemando
Sep 5, 2012
Undergraduate / 'Lessons from my friend' - 12TH GRADE COLLEGE ESSAY CHECK [7]
Sometimes, the best friends that leave a lasting impact on our lives aren't just the ones who go with us to parties and are considered our gossip buddies , but the ones we confide our innermost secrets and emotions in. They are the ones we run to for advice when parents don't understand, the ones we laugh with when we need a break from the day-to-day challenges, and the ones we promise that we'll be at each others weddings in the near future. They are the ones we consider our siblings. My best friend is the guy who's heart is filled with love. He is a boy full of enthusiasm. Through his simple and easy thoughts, he has become my role model in many ways. He has made me come to understand the sense of responsibility, care for others, and most importantly, acceptance.
As we both grew, I was no longer able to see him as much and be as close to him considering he was two grade levels ahead of me. He has already been meeting many others in the real world, college. However, he continues to transform my life with his words and actions. I can go to him with whatever problem I encounter in life . He has taught me many lessons in my existence, all of which have molded will continue to mold my life in its entirety. He has affected every aspect in my life; from the way I dress, to the way I perceive life. I consider it as a phenomenal thing because he has showed me the great things that can be accomplished in life, has taught me many great things like to believe, to forgive, and to have faith, and has inspired me to become successful in everything I do.
I went through a rough patch in my life where I felt like it was all crashing down on me. My family had broken apart, my social life was destroyed, and I thought there was no point in even trying to be happy anymore. What I finally realized is it's how you recover from the situation which makes you improve in the future and that you learn from your mistakes. I was in the mode of giving up when I almost didn't realize I was extremely blessed to have a great individual right there next to me to pick me up when I was falling. Rather than drowning me with compliments and tip toeing around my feelings he was one to tell me straight up how
Everything that my best friend has done has been chances for me to grow. While being with him has been spectacular, I have learned valuable lessons along with it all. Without him knowing, he has given me a chance mature along with him, and he has enriched my life with his acceptance for others. In his simple and easy thoughts, I have seen the never ending learning experiences through life.
Sometimes, the best friends that leave a lasting impact on our lives aren't just the ones who go with us to parties and are considered our gossip buddies , but the ones we confide our innermost secrets and emotions in. They are the ones we run to for advice when parents don't understand, the ones we laugh with when we need a break from the day-to-day challenges, and the ones we promise that we'll be at each others weddings in the near future. They are the ones we consider our siblings. My best friend is the guy who's heart is filled with love. He is a boy full of enthusiasm. Through his simple and easy thoughts, he has become my role model in many ways. He has made me come to understand the sense of responsibility, care for others, and most importantly, acceptance.
As we both grew, I was no longer able to see him as much and be as close to him considering he was two grade levels ahead of me. He has already been meeting many others in the real world, college. However, he continues to transform my life with his words and actions. I can go to him with whatever problem I encounter in life . He has taught me many lessons in my existence, all of which have molded will continue to mold my life in its entirety. He has affected every aspect in my life; from the way I dress, to the way I perceive life. I consider it as a phenomenal thing because he has showed me the great things that can be accomplished in life, has taught me many great things like to believe, to forgive, and to have faith, and has inspired me to become successful in everything I do.
I went through a rough patch in my life where I felt like it was all crashing down on me. My family had broken apart, my social life was destroyed, and I thought there was no point in even trying to be happy anymore. What I finally realized is it's how you recover from the situation which makes you improve in the future and that you learn from your mistakes. I was in the mode of giving up when I almost didn't realize I was extremely blessed to have a great individual right there next to me to pick me up when I was falling. Rather than drowning me with compliments and tip toeing around my feelings he was one to tell me straight up how
Everything that my best friend has done has been chances for me to grow. While being with him has been spectacular, I have learned valuable lessons along with it all. Without him knowing, he has given me a chance mature along with him, and he has enriched my life with his acceptance for others. In his simple and easy thoughts, I have seen the never ending learning experiences through life.
