Posts by alladin06
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Last Post: Oct 25, 2012
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Undergraduate /
'Not black and white' - Common App Short Answer - Piano [7]
No. I like how it explains you as a person. and no. This is actually very powerful so I say leave it. With undulate, I like it as a word, but it seems too complex. keep in mind they read thousands of essays. you don't want to make them think too hard.
Undergraduate /
Academic school choice. Need help for final critiques [4]
With the understanding that the choice of academic school you indicated is not binding, explain why you are applying to that particular school of study.2000 character limit
As a child, instead of watching Saturday morning cartoons, I used to watch videos on how things were made. I was fascinated with the fact that inside every gadget, there were different components helping it function. I wanted to know what those components were. As time progressed, I became obsessed with a single question: "why?" Then I got my first iPod. I was a curious child who had the habit of taking things apart just to learn what was going on in the inside. I was overwhelmed with a need to know how each aspect of it functioned. From the software to the wireless connection to the LCD screen, I wanted to know it all. But being a child I didn't really have the knowledge to understand the complete technical aspects of my IPod. Entering High school, I extensively researched several career paths and decided that engineering would be the most beneficial to me in unraveling the mysteries of the electronic world. Junior year, I was introduced to coding by my Pre-AP computer science class. I became interested in software, but I missed seeing how the hardware and software cooperated. Within engineering, I chose electrical computer engineering because not only does it keep me engaged with moderate amounts of coding, but it also allows me to explore my passions for understanding the inner workings of electronics.
Undergraduate /
'Not black and white' - Common App Short Answer - Piano [7]
I think your current intro is fine. Go ahead and use: "The negative energy that exits my body through my fingertips transforms into dulcet sounding chords that fill and echo through my empty mind." as it seems more friendly. My issue came when I was reading through and saw the word "undulate". This seems too complex of a word to describe an action. I had to read it a few times and look at the context to understand. I love the ending.
Undergraduate /
UNC Business School. Provide example of leadership challenge you faced... [2]
Although you need to show leadership, don't talk yourself up. "Being apart from both my customers and workers required exceptional leadership. ", seems a bit cocky.
You only mention the actual college you want to go to in the end. I wish you would add more to that so that the school sees that you are really interested in going.
Undergraduate /
'Passion for debate and joy of winning' - extracurricular Short Essay [5]
Please briefly elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities or work experiences in the space below (1000 character maximum).
Debate has allowed me to take my passion for information and combine it with my logical reasoning in a competitive setting. Debate is one part argument and two parts research. After all, if I don't understand a topic, I won't be able to make a very convincing argument for or against it. Countless hours are spent painstakingly researching every aspect of the resolution. After compiling this plethora of data into a case, I would finally be ready to put all of that knowledge to use. When I walk into the room to begin my round, I am filled with a rush of adrenaline that is from in part nerves but also the excitement of doing what I love. Besides the exhilaration of arguing , I also have met some amazing people. Some of the closest personal bonds I have made came from a mutual enthusiasm for debate. Through the joys of winning and the sorrows of losing, my teammates have become like a family to me. Debate has become my haven, my home away from home.
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