Writing Feedback / Some welcome change while others are not. Which way is better? [4]

Topic: some people prefer to spend their lives going the same thing and avoiding change . Others think that change is always a good thing

It is quite chear that everything around them always changes day by day. More and more people recogized that changing their lives is necessary. However others agrue that they do not change their styles which bring them som disadvantages. I believed that the people shoult seek a balance between changes and not changes depend on circumtances surrounding.

First of all, it is obvious that some people prefer to spend their lives doing same thing and avoiding change. Unfortunately, the most reason are security ang familarity. Most importantly, people by nature believe the same ways of doing things would make their lives more safer. For example, when they are to change their jobs, everything may give them much worries and a lot of difficulties as they are gooing to get a good job or whta type of colleagues would be. In other way, many purpose doing the same thing because they used to be them. Some people do not like to move new house, even if it is going to be confortable and convienient for them in the future. They can not imagine how their life is going improve

On the other hand, people are able to develop their skills, explore new things and discover their strengths and weakness. Firstly, change is integral part of our lives. From the time when we are children to nowadays when we have a baby and become parents, we all have been through stage of change. For example, when you are child, you just loved your parents and played outside with your friends. Day by day, you would grow up, you make friend after that you have been fallen in your loves, you could travel other places yourself to explore many things you don't know. Therefore, a great number of changes do us good. In many case, we may find that changes make us stronger, more experience, mature and mor self satisfaction.

In my opinion, changes is always a healthy thing that help us to gain new experience. We are not able to avoid changes, but we can try to do best. This is because this life is considered a dymatic process to me that you will finally find yourself changes hardly to be stopped from happening

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Writing Feedback / 'Uniting together' -In many cities, crime is increasing why do u think that happening [6]

"In many cities, crime is increasing why do u think that happening? what can government do to help reduce crime level?"

In recent years, people have to face crime all over the world, especially in the cities. Moreover, there are more criminals being more dangerous day by day and there are not the sign for reducing this problem.

In my personal view, lacking of opportunities is one of the main reasons. Because most of the crime's roof is money. While money the labor requirements do not increase, population is increasing steadily, so many people who can not get the jobs have to find other ways to get money for survival. it is as a result that unemployed who have wrong thought become criminal easily. They can become thieves, robbers and even offenders.

Another reason for this problem is stress. Being worried about money, family, social relationships, pollution in cities, people get strain easily. Furthermore, they live in a competitive environment so they will be more greedy and jealous. they can treat badly to others, if that benefits for them.

Although the governments try to reduce social evils, especially crime, there have not been the decreasing sign yet. One of the solutions for this is making more jobs for poor people. in addition, the governments have to help poor children to have study chances. Base on it, children have right view about society and everything happening around them. Beside that, the governments should improve and expand the police and security systems to keep criminals away from society.

In conclusion, everyone and the governments must unite together and help each other to look forward the same purpose which is reducing the number and level of crime.

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