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Posts by Frenzyzqq
Joined: Dec 18, 2012
Last Post: Dec 24, 2012
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Frenzyzqq   
Dec 24, 2012
Writing Feedback / Main function of universities; Well-rounded graduates [3]

Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace. Others think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of whether the course is useful to an employee.

What, in your opinion, should be the main function of a university?

Since the dawn of tertiary education, the main function of a university has been a frequent topic of discussion. Some people hold the opinion that employable skills and knowledge should be the concentration of teaching tasks, while others think universities should provide more than that.

In the increasingly materialistic era, citizens appear to be more realistic and target aiming. We tend to push things through even in education, which arouse the voice of establishing institutions such as vocational schools to just offer marketable knowledge. Specifically, those schools eliminate unrelated courses to minimize the length of study period so that students are able to graduate and work much earlier compared to their counterparts. As a result, it seems to be quite effective on condition that colleges focus on how to satisfy the market.

Nevertheless, opponents maintain that necessary knowledge including high moral values should be accessible to receivers. Without a clear and correct viewpoint towards the meaning of life and a sense of responsibility for the society, a straight-A student may commit suicide or even hold grudge against the society. Several tragic gunshots caused by well-educated students have definitely proven it. Additionally, as a fact that most teenagers cannot anticipate their careers when choosing majors, a great number of graduates probably won't seek a profession related job. Therefore, in case that teachers impart knowledge on the ability to learn besides employable skills, students have a greater chance to survive the societal competition in the long term.

In conclusion, I am convinced that the true function of a university is providing various knowledge for its own sake. Moreover, it is my belief that the ultimate goal of tertiary education should be cultivating well-rounded graduates rather than employees only.

i am afrain i am a litte off the topic
Frenzyzqq   
Dec 21, 2012
Writing Feedback / IELTS - Technology: taking control our lives or positive developements [3]

Ozia
In the modern era, the topic of technological influence is controversial. There is clear divergence of opinions on this. One is that the technology will bring more harm than benefits to the society, whilst others contend that it has more advantages. Although both perspectives value, I consider the latter to be more convincing.

There are a few powerful rationales supporting the belief that technology is becoming a threat for humans. Specifically , it is believed that many health problems are related with the fact that people overuse techonology . For example, using technology devices is very inactive, electronic consumers will have a higher chance to have obesity, which is a health problem linked to heart attack. This is a very serious health issue related to techonogy.

That being said, there are powerful counter arguments to the above. For instance, the innovations in technology have brought us enormous labour benefits. Without technology, we cannot produce electricity to meet today's energy requirements. Consequently, the whole manufacturing processes will be shut down all over the world. In other words, our society will definitely collapse if there was no technology. Additionally , it is also important to consider the benefits to human health brought by technology. Various kinds of medicine as well as medical instruments have been invented to prevent and treat diseases that people feared in the past. As a result, the average life expectancy has increased significantly during the last century.

While it is clear that there are sound reasons which support both sides of this debate, I am convinced that technology improvement is adventagous to be grealy more compelling than its opposite. For the benefits of humankind, it is necessary that we make proper decisions to ensure the best future.
Frenzyzqq   
Dec 19, 2012
Writing Feedback / IELTS; Guns should be better controlled or even banned [7]

i am new here,so i dont know how to reply you one by one.
i have several questions here.
is harm countable or not,should i say devastating harm or harms?
is it unacceptable to use two tenses in one sentence?
by the way, hungvud, i like the expression: huanted threat, it is very vivid.
Frenzyzqq   
Dec 18, 2012
Writing Feedback / IELTS; Guns should be better controlled or even banned [7]

Whether normal citizens can arm guns or not has been a frequent topic of discussion for a long period. Recent US gun shot which killed innocent children and responsible staff brought endless sorrow to the community and arouse the public's rethinking towards gun control.

Advocates, who maintain gun ownership is a civil right , hold on the belief that firearms play an essential role in self-defense. Specifically, as gun control laws and policy vary greatly around the word, some people from countries where rights to keep and bear arms are guaranteed by national constitution treat gun possession as individual liberties. Besides, researches have also shown that victims armed with a weapon are less likely to be murdered or robbed than those who don't have one when crime occurs.

Nevertheless, opponents suggest that the government enact strict laws to forbid guns. Assault weapons easily accessible to the public , to some extent ,increase the rate of suicide and domestic violence . Generally speaking, suicide candidates have greater chances to kill themselves successfully with a gun at hand than others using alternative methods. Moreover, devastating harm caused by gunshot supports the notion that a federal ban on assault weapons should take effect. A weapon is so powerful that a criminal can shoot so many people in such short time. What's even worse, it seems to be more difficult to resist and overtake a criminal with a gun. Therefore, compared with other violence, serial gunshot normally lead to higher death toll . Overall, the availability of purchasing , trading and bearing guns puts the whole societal members under threat and disrupt the stability of the nation as a whole.

To sum up, despite of the purpose of self protection, I personally stick to the latter opinion that guns are better controlled or even banned in public. Whereas in those countries where gun possession is historically legal, harsher measures should be taken to scrutinize the nation's gun laws, mental health system and the role that violent video games and movies might play in shootings.
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