Undergraduate / Family/ Shool ; MIT essay-My world shaping my aspirations; [5]

Describe the world you come from; for example, your family, clubs, school, community, city, or town. How has that world shaped your dreams and aspirations? (250 words)

[u]My Essay:[/u]

As a child, I have grown listening to stories from my grandfather and eating food through my grandmother's hands. In the evening when my parents returned from office, I used to take them to McDonald to buy me a 'Happy Meal' for the small toy that came free with it. Every morning, while waiting for my School Bus, I used to peep inside the McDonald's window to see the latest toy and finally grab it in the evening. For this child, every thing was as easy to achieve as those small electric toys. This child hidden in me still empowers me to aim big because he thinks that even today the world will conspire to get him what he wants. However, the wonderful realization is that, how the desires have changed: from collecting electronic toys to creating electronic marvels. This dream inspires me to be an engineer at MIT.

My school has been a wonderful place to be in. I entered as a casual individual and would pass out as polished person. I realize that my journey was the real reward. It was the sense of belonging that I had towards my school that made me contribute to it's community in various ways, right from closing the running water tap that everyone ignored to being the school ambassador or the Head Boy. In return, I automatically became more proficient. I was selfless yet I got much from my school. I made a mark. I'll do the same, wherever I go!

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