Posts by Kreator95

Kreator95

Dec 23, 2012

Undergraduate / To show the world that "We Exist"is my vision ; Stanford Supp/ Intellectual Vitality [8]

Being a minority myself, I understand and can relate to the stereotypes you have gone through. I believe the topic of discrimination is unique which you can use to your advantage. Your essay sounds good, but I believe you should talk more about what this experience has made your realize. If I am not mistaken this experience has made you desire to end discrimination. You should focus and emphasize the development you have gone through. Show your vitality and this essay will be golden. Good Luck!!

Mind checking my what matters to me essay. I wrote about the discrimination and societal pressures as well, but I feel I am missing something.

Kreator95

Dec 23, 2012

Undergraduate / Stanford Supp: What matters to you and why?my brother was stuck on the father space [6]

I agree with jcubed you should look for a more smoother transition. You should reflect more on why it matters. Making yourself shine throughout the essay is important.

Kreator95

Dec 23, 2012

Undergraduate / "He, who opens a school door, closes a prison";Stanford Sup/ What matters to you& [5]

Prompt: What matters to you, and why? Feed back and help thanxx

"He, who opens a school door, closes a prison" is a proverb that has become true to my life. Victor Hugo's words have propelled me to seek an education in order to break the barriers imposed upon my culture. His words have allowed me to escape the prison of ignorance in which I have been wrapped in for so many years. A young Latino male growing up in the impoverished area of South Los Angeles has no chance of succeeding in life, or so I was made to believe. Deprived of a normal childhood, I was obligated to work incessantly in order to help provide for the financially unstable family l was born into. Statistics depict a dismal future in which a mediocre job will lead to my economic distress, yet I refuse to accept this future.

My honesty, my commitment, my dedication, my determination, and my desire to succeed portray a future where I will overcome the various obstacles that stand in my path. With education I will slay the stereotypes that exist. I will rise above the limitations and constraints that society has imposed upon me. The fact that my family has suffered through years of deprivation, degradation, discrimination, and exploitation cannot and will not change, but with education I will end the cycle of poverty that my family finds itself in.

I will not let my parent's suffering, sacrifice, and arduous labor be in vain, for I am determined to succeed in life. Education is an invaluable resource, yet many individuals in my community fail to recognize its value. But with education I will be able to accomplish what others deem impossible for me. Although I have had to work to help my family, I will never let anything from obtaining the education I so desire. I will continue to work hard in order to distinguish myself, for with education, my way to prosperity and success, I will pave a path for future generations to follow, thus "closing various prisons".