MustafaSalah
Dec 28, 2012
Undergraduate / Understanding each other; Cornell Supplement_Intellectual Interest [2]
Hi buddy,
I thinks its good,honestly ,I liked you introduction its kinda made a clear image of what you want to say except of the"Tktktktk...tktktktktktk" part its kinda weird ,and I think you need to start the second paragraph with a phrase that connects it with the first one,its just my opinion ,but generally its clear and beautiful ,great job,at least that's how I see it I don't know if others agree,^__^
hope I was helpful,and maybe you can help me with my essay...
Hi buddy,
I thinks its good,honestly ,I liked you introduction its kinda made a clear image of what you want to say except of the"Tktktktk...tktktktktktk" part its kinda weird ,and I think you need to start the second paragraph with a phrase that connects it with the first one,its just my opinion ,but generally its clear and beautiful ,great job,at least that's how I see it I don't know if others agree,^__^
hope I was helpful,and maybe you can help me with my essay...