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Colombiankid94   
Dec 30, 2012
Undergraduate / NYU COM. APP-GLOBAL NETWORK/CAMPUS [7]

First off, i want to thank you for proof reading my essay and reminding me about contractions.

Social media has dictated( introduced? ) a whole new audience for news casters.

They are no longeronly producing 5 o'clock shows for people on the other side of a television set, but for people on websites like Facebook and Twitteralso

- In addition New York, beeing haven for this multi-media world , is the power house of the world providing people with opportunities and the American Dream.

thats it, the rest i belive is great!.

AHHHH i <3 your campus statement! its slightly poetic and i really fell your need to want to go back to NY. i don't have anything to change for that one.
Colombiankid94   
Dec 30, 2012
Undergraduate / Great city/ Wide range of studies/ College experience; WHY NYU? [19]

Really good stuff you got there; hard to help you because I think its really good. the only thing i guess i could say is how you stated how you knew NY your hole life, but your making it sound like you just visited the empire state for the first time. I would change it to like "at the beginning of every summer, i would go up to the empire state building, and i would be reminded how great of a city i live in becouse of all the new lights and people I see each year"... something along those lines. BTW thanks for review.
Colombiankid94   
Dec 30, 2012
Undergraduate / Bogota streets / Human body / Help through work - NYU supplements [4]

-Q:Tell us why you have chosen the above campus (using a maximum of 700 characters-spaces and punctuation included).

A: I've lived in different atmospheres throughout my life; from the culture filled streets of Bogota, to the calm conservative town of Norcross. These shifts have shaped me into a better person by granting me the skill of a better world view. But, there are other lifestyles out there, and NYU is the best place where I can enhance this skill. To start off, the campus is in New York City, giving me a spoon full of an urban atmosphere. I want to see the tall bright buildings that fill the night sky and I want to share it with 8 million people that run this city. NYU doesn't stop there; it grants students the opportunity to explore other cultures as well with its massive study abroad program in multiple countries.

Q:NYU's global network provides students with hundreds of academic areas of interest for students to cultivate their intellectual curiosity and to help achieve their career goals. Whether you are entirely undecided about your academic plans or you have a definitive program of study in mind, what are your own academic interests? Feel free to share any thoughts on any particular programs or how you might explore those interests at NYU on any of our campuses

A:Time and again throughout my life I have found myself sickened with the malevolent emotions that run the human body. Rage, envy, and disperse comes into a person's life unexpectedly only to destroy everything they care for. During a research paper I did on Otto Loewi and neuroscience for my IB psychology class, I found myself mesmerized on the chemical compounds that are neurotransmitters. These compounds are constantly flowing inside of our brain and it account for almost all of our actions, thoughts, and emotions. Through this, I know that if a person is able to control the neurotransmitters that run through his or her brain, then he or she could theoretically control whether or not to feel rage, envy, and/or despair. Neurology is a fascinating field and it's growing in an astonishing rate. There is no better place to peruse my doctorates career than at NYU. Your CNS (Center of Neural Science) program in the arts and science campus is ranked as one of the highest in the nation; giving me the perfect opportunity to expand on my knowledge of neurotransmitters while also giving me the resources for me to start in my personal study of controlling unstable emotions. NYU also has some of the world leading neurologist as professors, like Rodolfo LlinĂĄs. I have read a few of his studies and I would be honored to learn from this Colombian genius. I have seen through personal experiences how emotions can get the best of people. That is why I feel so drawn to neurology; I want to help people that cannot control there vicious emotions through medical science that is neurology.

Q:What intrigues you? Tell us about one work of art, scientific achievement, piece of literature, method of communication, or place in the world (a film, book, performance, website, event, location, etc.), and explain its significance to you.

A:It never seizes to intrigue me how the work of a person could help so many people that are in need, and that because of it their will live on in legacy. There is one specific scientific achievement that I always think about as I transition into the medical field. I was a very young boy when my mom took me to our local doctor's office in Bogota. As I sat impatiently next to my mom, I looked around the doctor's office and saw a poster that immediately grabbed my attention. It was of a cartoon scientist holding a giant syringe as a sword, and he was battling this huge grotesque looking mosquito. As I was staring at the poster, the doctor came in called my mom and I in to her office. We were talking about how frightening it would be if those huge mosquitos were real. "AHYAYAI!!!!", I screamed as the doctor secretly injected a vaccine into my arm. I was crying so obnoxiously and uncontrollably that my mom didn't know what to do. So the doctor came to me and then told me to follow her back to the poster I was recently looking at. She pointed at the valiant warrior and told me "Este caballero es Manuel Elkin Patarroyo" she then explained to me that it's people like him that we have medicine that protects us from giant mosquitos and other monsters. After that, I sat back down to take the rest of my shots. Looking back on Elkin, I respect him and his ability to find the cure for malaria. His name is a legacy all over Colombia, and he inspires anyone to achieve great things.
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