mnunez1107
Jan 1, 2013
mnunez1107
Jan 1, 2013
Undergraduate / Central American immigrants and American Dream - Columbia Supp. 2 [7]
I think you should be more detailed about what is it that makes you fascinated by the library. Go straight into you being a reader. "access to international knowledge must also be phenomenal." change the must also be to "is phenomenal" I feel like you're being a little bit of a brown noser and it happens even if you dont mean to do it. Ive done that too before. Towards the end I would make it more about you.
I think you should be more detailed about what is it that makes you fascinated by the library. Go straight into you being a reader. "access to international knowledge must also be phenomenal." change the must also be to "is phenomenal" I feel like you're being a little bit of a brown noser and it happens even if you dont mean to do it. Ive done that too before. Towards the end I would make it more about you.
mnunez1107
Jan 1, 2013
Undergraduate / Central American immigrants and American Dream - Columbia Supp. 2 [7]
whats the prompt?
whats the prompt?
mnunez1107
Jan 1, 2013
Undergraduate / Music and musical diversity; NYU "Academic Interests" [2]
I wouldnt talk about the past. Focus on what you will do specifically at NYU.
I wouldnt talk about the past. Focus on what you will do specifically at NYU.
mnunez1107
Jan 1, 2013
Undergraduate / Combine different subjects ; UPenn supp: How will you engage academically? [6]
Your answer is vague. I suggest being specific by looking up programs in your field and specific courses and to that add what you will bring to them.
Your answer is vague. I suggest being specific by looking up programs in your field and specific courses and to that add what you will bring to them.
mnunez1107
Jan 1, 2013
Undergraduate / Born in USA as a Muslim/ U MICH; COMMUNITY ESSAY [3]
I dont think you need this:
"a lot of people leave their homes as soon as they turn eight-teen to start their own new life and only visit their parents once in a while. but as soon" its irrelevant and it doesnt distinguish your community because that usually happens in every community.
I dont think you need this:
"a lot of people leave their homes as soon as they turn eight-teen to start their own new life and only visit their parents once in a while. but as soon" its irrelevant and it doesnt distinguish your community because that usually happens in every community.
