Undergraduate / Shyness and the Germans; Common App- Activity Expansion [4]

Hey again, wow I'm putting a lot of essays up here. Then again, I'm sure many others are as well.
This essay is the response to the Activity question on the Common App. I originally wrote out a short essay, about one and a half times this size, and then "Cut out the fat", to make it 1000 words. Enjoy?

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Please briefly elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities or work experiences in the space below (1000 character maximum). (Activity in Question is Learning German)

Shyness and the Germans"Oh, wie Lange haben Sie Deutsch gelernt?"I have always been shy, or, so I'd told myself. I'd stayed this way for a large portion of my life, abroad and at home, and been comfortable with it. Yet, without even noticing, I started something that would change me.

I started teaching myself German.
I admit; my original motive to learning was the "Coolness factor" associated with Polyglotism. So I tried and tried my what I thought was my hardest to learn German.

Nothing. Not until I came across an idea to Speak German. My response to this was "I'm too shy!" But, I finally tried from the safety of my own computer.

As I connected, I said a quiet "hallo?" in what must have been a mix of an American, Lithuanian, and German accent. I waited for laughter. I was surprised to hear a voice, just as unsure, and just as foreign, respond. It became my first German conversation.

Others followed in the succeeding days, and I slowly stopped describing myself as "Shy", only "Me".
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Thanks, and feedback would be appreciated.
I know there are definitely parts I can fix.

Undergraduate / "Love at First Sight" : Why Colorado College? [5]

Hey, this is my other supplement for Colorado College, some parts I'm a bit weary about, but here it is.

How did you learn about Colorado College and why do you wish to attend?
Title(Maybe something to do with Love?)
People don't tend to believe in "Love at First Sight"; people think that there's a certain amount of time that needs to pass, or that you have to really get to know the little quirks that make something really special. I completely agree with that, and feel the same way about Colorado College. My first impression was when a friend, who had just applied, recommended it to me. I only saw it as a school that was one of thousands. But, when I visited the website, and was greeted by a breathtaking picture of the scenic Rocky Mountain backdrop of the campus, my flirting with Colorado College had started. As I learned more, as I spent what felt like every waking moment studying the goals and ideals of the school, seeing videos of the stunning campus and scenic environment, and as I started to feel at home, I realized that CC is truly one in a thousand.

Colorado College seems to put a great deal of emphasis on being unique, and promoting an outstanding educational experience, and these core values draw me to CC. The use of a Block Schedule system is one of several qualities that make CC stand out, and attract passionate and creative students. I feel that being fully immersed in a single field is an incredibly effective way to learn anything, and making it first priority really shows a commitment to education.

The commitment to Students is very impressive, from the "First-year Experience", the emphasis of extracurricular activities, to the support of the Venture Grant program. Student-Teacher Connections are very important to me, coming from a small High School. CC has taken them one step further, with the Breaking Bread program, to establish lasting contacts and connections with teachers, as friends, and colleagues.

Colorado College, I believe, is right for me. The Block Schedule is Intuitive, and makes education both easier, and more comprehensive. CC also values its students, even outside of their academics. The same students who, like I, had fell in love with Colorado College.

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Thanks for any feedback!

Undergraduate / History of Science Fiction; Colorado C- Intellectual Adventure [5]

Hey there all, just getting some feedback for college app stuff.
REQUIRED: The Block Plan at Colorado College has a tradition of innovation and flexibility. Please design your own three-and-a-half week intellectual adventure and describe what you would do.

Course Description: History of Science Fiction
Science Fiction, as a genre, is very broad by its nature, and arguably relatively new. Science Fiction can be defined by themes that (usually) abide by the scientifically established laws of physics, nature, and the universe. Students will study influential short stories, novels, plays and movies of the genre, observe and trace the development of different subgenres (Time Travel, Aliens, Alternative History, etc.), and highlight the influence that Science Fiction has had on significant scientific advances.

Content Includes: H.G. Wells, Neal Stephenson, Star Trek, Ray Bradbury, Karel Čapek, Alien, Isaac Asimov, Kurt Vonnegut, Doctor Who, Jules Verne, and others, dependent on Student interests.

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What I'm worried about is that this may seem as too short, but since there wasn't a lot of guidance, I wrote it like the kind of Course description you'd see in a catalog.

Tell me what you think, and thank you!