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Patty An   
Feb 20, 2013
Writing Feedback / people use the mobile phone or computer to communicate, and no longer write letters [3]

More and more people use the mobile phone or computer to communicate, and no longer write letters to each other. Some people think the skills of letter writing will soon disappear completely. Do you agree or disagree? 294words

Currently, with the advent of computers and mobile phones, an increasing number of people choose to communicate via these hi-tech tools due to their convenience instead of writing a letter.Therefore,some people advocate that the techniques of letter writing will be replaced completely in the near future. From my perspective, the skills will not disappear totally because of its inherent values.

It is obvious that many occasions ,from workplace to campus,still need letters.Many universities,for example, are more likely to send handwriting letters to inform students that they are available to their schools.As the headmasters think in this way, they can express their sincere to students and more students will be attracted to their schools.Also,when competing a job, a good letter can help applicants gain more attention.As we can see how wonderful the person is through the letter he writes.

Moreover, writing letters is a traditional skill in China. We can see that the majority of schools regard writing letters as a basic skill of language learning,which means nearly every person in our country is leaning or has acquired how to write letters .So this technique is impossibly vanishing.

on the other hand, we cannot neglect the efficiency that mobile phones and computers brings to people's life. It only takes people minutes even seconds to receive a message via phones or computers while people will spend days or weeks to see a letter.But most of information delivered by phones and computers are not that important.Sometimes,it is just a way for fun.

In conclusion,as a traditional skill,the technique of letter writing are always needed in official occasions. While computers and phones boost our efficiency, they are not polite to some extent.
Patty An   
Feb 20, 2013
Writing Feedback / (IELTS) People in the past used to be more dependent on one another [7]

I like your introduction.
but I think your third paragraph is supportive enough, I mean, in your essay I tend to believe that people are becoming more independent.

As parents has lesser time spent with their children mainly due to job issues, children have learnt how to take care of themselves.

"have"
Patty An   
Feb 20, 2013
Writing Feedback / Accuaracy of information found on the internet [2]

Currently, anyone can post information on the internet. Therefore, most information on the internet might be inaccurate. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In this information era, with the spread of internet,news is conveyed much easier than before. The majority of people consider the internet as a platform to express their thoughts. However, some people may concern about the accuracy of information on the internet.From my perspective, most of important news showed online is trust-worthing.

The obvious reason is that although the internet is available for everyone, the main websites are required registration,which means everyone should be responsible for their behaviors.Otherwise,they will be punished by the government.For example, in 2003, there was a serious disease spreading in China,some people registered on the websites spread that the salt can ensure people against the disease,which lead to a large number of people choose to eat salt instead of seeing a doctor. Unfortunately, numerous people died due to this rumor.Of course, the rumor-makers are ended up in jails.

Another reason to be mentioned is that a great deal of important information is published by professional institutions,such as the government and universities. For the sake of their reputation and authority, these institutions would definitely post accurate information on their websites to gain popularity and trust.

Of course, that is not to say there is no inaccurate information on the internet. Some informal media coverage gossip about celebrities to the viewers. But such information is unimportant and most people just watch these news for entertainment.While if the media infringe on notables' rights,they will be penalized as well.

In conclusion, although anyone can write news online, they have to enjoy the freedom on the premise of abiding the law and most of the important news comes from professional groups .Therefore, we can say that the most of information online is reliable.
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