Writing Feedback / TOEFL: Living with families for a longer time [6]

There is no denying that parents are our teachers providing guidance when we are lost, giving supports when we are stuck in troubles and realistically to say, offering financial assistance to us. Since we are not mentally ready to living on our own without parents' help, we would definitely better live with our parents. In this case, we would have enough time to prepare ourselves, have sufficient financial support to finishing education and we could also avoid making big mistakes when making decisions. From these perspectives, it is undoubtedly that living with parents creates unconceivable benefits for our lives, however, we failed to realize the numerous disadvantages brought by being dependent on parents. From my point of view, the demerits outweigh the merits.

Although parents can make our lives easier and allow us well prepared for the future life in certain aspects, they make us too lazy to think by ourselves and be anxious when when they are absent. You experience it, and then you learn from it, meaning that if you count on your parents' advice and guidance, you will inevitably lose opportunities to learn from mistakes and improve yourself. On the contrary, when you making decisions on you own, you are cultivating a kind of significant ability called critical thinking which beneficial to your study, to you work and literally to your entire life. Also, since you have experience in making decisions, you will not feel anxious and lazy when you need to do that.

Moreover, living with parents and depending on them are more likely to adversely affect relationships with our parents. Firstly, even though our parents' suggestions are to some extent helpful and for the sake of our benefits, they do out of date, say too conservative. Take my parents as an example. Whenever talking about my future marital mate, they both strongly oppose me to marry a distant person because they seem to think that only people they know well such as their friends' or colleges' son is reliable. Therefore, a discrepancy between us as let to and an unpleasant conservation is caused. In addition, out of care or many other reasons they are always interfering my personal stuff. I know it is because of their love that they want to prepare everything for me, ask reasons when I back home late than seven o'clock and even interfere who I can make friends with but it is really annoying which makes it easier for us to initiate quarrels.

In conclusion, living with parents does relive our burden physically and mentally, it generally and unavoidably lets us become over-dependent, less responsive to difficulties and failures and also less qualified for the life.

Writing Feedback / TOEFL ; What is better - More vocation time or More Salary? [3]

A job with more vocation time but a low salary is better than a job with a high salary but less vacation time.

A job with more vocation time but a low salary, admittedly, do lead to conflicts and quarrels between relatives owing to the thin salary, let individuals fail to satisfy material needs and even render people become lazy and cease to trying to make futher progresses. Ugly as it is, people fail to recognize the significant merits this kind of job brings out, namely, great emotional pleasant, a sturdy physique and higher efficiency when coming back to work.

The foundamental factor to explain my position is that a job with more vocation time but a low salary equips people with more opportunities to enjoy family warmth and make them feel more delighted. More vacation enables people to have a plenty of time to keep company with girlfriend or wife to go shopping, watching movies and go holidays. Also, people could have more time to help their children with studys and chat with them so as to eliminate generation gap. However, if people are occupied with numerous tasks and works, they can barely have time to enjoy the family warmth and even deprive their children of rights to acquir knowledge from parents. It is not hard to conceive that how regretful people will feel.

The additional reason for my choice is, I think, that only a job with more vocation time can make it possible that people are physically healthy. Sitting at desk for a long time will leave an ache in waist and back. The worst thing is they are more likely to ill in their backbone. Whereas once they have more vacation which they can govern freely, they can do some exercises, say, jogging in the morning, go hiking or camping, go swimming etc, all of which will enable them surdy bodies. Also, doing exercise can help people relieve stress, decrease irritancy and fly mood. There is no denial that only when people have adequate time doing exercises, can they be blessed with health physiques.

In addition, a job with more vocation time will allow people to reflect themselves, to relax themselves and to organize their life and subsequently, their efficiencies will be substantially improved. On the contrary, people always being busy with trivial things are easier to be exausted and bored, thus, they become slower with works. Besides, they are more likely to leave things in a totally mess and get crazy when finding something they need.

Although I agree that there may be a couple of disadvantages of the job with more vocation time but a low salary, I feel that the advantages are more obvious. A job with more vocation time provids a great emotional pleasant, a sturdy physique and higher working efficiency.

Writing Feedback / TOEFL;Reviewing the PAST is important to solve the problem of the present future [2]

TOEFL In order to solve the problem of the present and the future, we should review the past.

In the course of human civilization, the past exerts a significant impact on solving the problem of the present and the future. From the past, individuals can secure experience to cope with troublesome issues such as economic cricis and political comflicts, attain role models with humble and obedient merits, obtain inspiration when researching and developing advanced technologies such as artificial satallite and spacecrafts. However, people fail to recognize the limitation of adopting past experience to handle present and future problems, say, time effectiveness of previous methods, emergence of new questions and requirements for renovation and originality in contemporary era.

The only thing that doesn't change is the fact that we are always changing. In this case, feasible approaches in precious time may be unpractical in certain circumstances. For instance, in ancient times, emperor consolidated their regime through military expansion and what he should do is to guarantee soilders had robust physiques and always being brave. However, in modern society, particularily as the modernization process moves forward, application of advanced equipments and technologies in military is indispensible. Therefore, not only do soilders need sturdy good health, but grasp of useful theories and manipulation of sofisticated technologies. Obviously, old demands do no help in solving current matters.

Another boundedness of previous experience is that it fails to provide documentaty records of particular problems which had never appeared before. Admittedly, there are numerous troubles people stuck in only occuring in present society and thus, no precautious measure to prevent them, let along to deal with them. Under this circumstance, there's no good in refering to the past when solving problems of the present and the future. For example, Internet fraud and criminate, traffic congestion, pollution and the like cannot be solved by tracing back to the past.

The last cause that reviewing the past when handle present and future troubles is unnecesary can be attributed to the want of initiality and originality in contemporary life. There is no denial that the past always offering traditional and conservative concepts and if people such as writers, composers and artistists are confined by the past, they will destined to be left behind by those equiped with inspiration and creativity.