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Posts by Muath1987
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Muath1987   
Jun 29, 2013
Writing Feedback / Children who grew up with hardships are better prepared to deal with problems; Agree? [2]

Children who are brought up in the family that do not have a lot of money are better prepared to deal with problems when they become adults than children who are brought up by wealthy parent.

Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

It is believed for some that children who raised in a poor family are more capable to deal with their problems at their adult's age than those who grew up in a rich family. Personally, while I agree with this statement, only life experience, however; is not enough consideration for a child to become well prepared in his or her future. This writing will be given reasons to support my opinion.

Although growing up with a family that is financially struggled has a valuable benefits, and a child can be taught unique skills to become a mature person in the future, there is other important aspects that can be much better. Education is the first perspective to consider, and it has a great effect on children to become independent adults. At school time, students are learning a variety of beneficial subjects that help them to be prepared for the problems to solve it successfully. These subjects are well dedicated and organized for students to have a special skills to overcome any of negative situations when they become adults. It contains a plenty of management skills which can be used to control difficult problems. Eventually, students will be educated perfectly to deal with such a problem that may face it in their future.

It is true that families who are under financial conditions have created a great basic skills of life to their children such as knowing the valuable of money, and this is undoubtedly a unique experience, schools have its own environmental experience which can be very useful for students to deal with different situations . For instance, students who are facing a difficulty on something may get helped by their classmates or friends who may have had the same situation. In fact, most of schools have provided support centers that help students to deal with certain issues particularly the unexpected financial issues. As a result, students will be able to benefit from these experiences when they have problems in their future.

To sum up, preparing children for the future is not quite easy. Therefore, I believe that the environment of both education and families have important roles to play with preparing children for controlling various problems that are hidden behind their future.
Muath1987   
May 20, 2013
Writing Feedback / What Should People Do To Become Healthier? [3]

Any help, especially with wording, is appreciated. To me, it sounds a bit repetitive and generic, so I'd love if anyone could help with that. Thanks in advance

In societies, human's health is one of the top topics of human's priorities, and people have become more interested to be healthier. It seems that the majority of people have some difficulties to identify the effective aspects that related to their health, others are not. They, however, may have issues with the ways of developing it. In the next following, a description about the aspects of health improvement and a few simple steps of becoming healthier will be given.

A healthy life is what most people are looking for, and the effective aspects of health improvement are hardly identifiable. Despite of this fact, there are several essential of them, and having a wide range of variety activities and regular exercises is the main one. People should take this function in a serious way, and they should have an adequate exercising of walking, swimming and playing various sports. Additionally, mental health is a part of human's health, and it is a term of how emotionally, psychologically and socially is one's health. Sometimes, people need a dedicated time to rest their bodies and minds during their daily life. Once they have relaxed them, their energy will be fully recharged for other ordinary demands of everyday life. Furthermore, following a unique diet is another important type of these aspects, and some people have the wrong view of the diet meaning which is eating a customized food. However, in this context, it means that a person should eat the right food to him such as measuring the amount of Vitamins, Protein and other products of nutrition. Also, a person should not eat a lot of fast food because recently a huge number of sick people have been caused by many restaurants. As a result, these aspects have to be carefully considered by the people who want to be healthier.

By following a few simple steps of health improvement, anyone can easily become healthier. To begin with, self-evaluation has to be at the beginning of any healthy program. This evaluation should answer each of what, where and how questions in order to have a successful starting. Basically, all the physical and mental negative habits in a person's life have to be identified. After highlighting these negatives, a new plan is required to stay healthy.

This plan should contain both of positive alternatives and new efficient ideas, and then it should be replaced with the unusual habits. Moreover, because of a new routine is expected to someone's life, a little patience is highly recommended, so they can go forward and make sure to stick to their plan. Eventually, exercising and social activities are the last step, and it has to be included into the list of a health development plan. As it mentioned previously, these different sports and activities have a high impact to human's health, and it will be reflected to their mental and physical health in a good way. These are the guidance ways that people who are interested on becoming healthier should follow, and it will positively result to a one's health in a very short time.

To conclude, health is undoubtedly important topic to human's priorities. The popularity of people in many societies has realized the importance of being healthy, and some of them cannot classify the significant impacts to develop their health. Well, there are several efficient aspects of them such as participating in the society activities or doing exercises, improving the mental health and making a personal diet, and people have to consider it seriously. By following the guidance points of health improvement, a one's life will become healthier. In fact, becoming healthier is quite easy; however, staying healthy is the most difficult part!
Muath1987   
May 18, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS : Reason of being overweight in children is due to fast food outlets or parents [4]

Good writing Shaddy,

However, what do you mean by this sentence:
(As it is their business so they will not stop children from having their food but ultimately these items are bad for their health)

I think it should be like this:
(As it is their business so children will not stop children from having their food but ultimately these items are bad for their health)

one more thing, you should work on punctuation as it is important to some test

Good Luck
Muath1987   
May 11, 2013
Writing Feedback / Biography Writing about Geoffrey Rush [3]

Geoffrey Rush is one of Australia's famous actors and producers. He was born in 6th of July, 1951, in Toowoomba, Queensland. He has been acting seriously in several movies during his career.

Many interesting events happened in Geoffrey's life before he became famous. He used to live in Toowoomba, which is one hour from Brisbane, with his parents. During his childhood, he used to dress up and act. He would watch television and copy actors. His mother used to be a school administration, and his father was a refrigerator engineer. When he was five years old, his parents divorced. A few years later, when he was twenty years old, he moved to Brisbane with his mother, where he started his degree in the arts field at University of Queensland. While he was studying, he used to join the Queensland Theater Company. He was involved in seventeen productions with them. In 1975, he had improved his skills in the arts field while he was taking some courses in theater major in Paris. Two years later, he returned back to QTC, and started his career with them.

Geoffrey Rush has had a successful movie career. To begin with, the first film that he made was in 1981. He has had small parts both in television and movies for sixteen years. Additionally, he had a breakthrough movie which was the Shine movie, and he won the Academy award as the best actor. He was the first Australian actor to win the Academy Award. Moreover, He has been in many movies such as Elizabeth, Shakespeare in Love, Finding Nemo and Pirates of the Caribbean since Shine. Now, He is a film producer, and he still acts in movies and theater.

In conclusion, Geoffrey Rush has been well known as the famous actor in Australia. His childhood was very interesting, and he has had a successful movie career. He is probably to continue acting in movies and producing as well.

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