kieulinhbs
Jun 15, 2013
Writing Feedback / The Effects of TV on Society, especially on children; [7]
Um, I seem to have many mistakes. Thanks for your correction!
Um, I seem to have many mistakes. Thanks for your correction!
kieulinhbs
Jun 15, 2013
Writing Feedback / The Effects of TV on Society, especially on children; [7]
Thanks for your comments. I will modify the way of writing.
Thanks for your comments. I will modify the way of writing.
kieulinhbs
Jun 15, 2013
Writing Feedback / The Effects of TV on Society, especially on children; [7]
One of the greatest concerns parents when facing an international moves is " How is the influence of TV on society with their children?". Firstly, watching TV makes people become lazy and passive. Children are interested in watching cartoon film, advertising programs. In addition to, manufacturers have many channel for children such as: Disney channel, BiBi and a lot of show games. Because of that , they can spend all day watching TV, they don't want to enjoy the activities outside. Secondly, it is bad effects with their health. As focus on screen for a long time - you are damaging your eyes. Futhermore, it will be very dangerous for your back, your aims, legs If you watching TV too much. The last and most important effects is children who can be influenced by violent film. Therefore, personality of them will growth toward nagative . Lack of comunication skills is a challenge of themself . Consequently, they have some problems with psychology. To sum up, TV is something we can't do without in our life, but the parent should teach them the way to choose an appropriate channel.
One of the greatest concerns parents when facing an international moves is " How is the influence of TV on society with their children?". Firstly, watching TV makes people become lazy and passive. Children are interested in watching cartoon film, advertising programs. In addition to, manufacturers have many channel for children such as: Disney channel, BiBi and a lot of show games. Because of that , they can spend all day watching TV, they don't want to enjoy the activities outside. Secondly, it is bad effects with their health. As focus on screen for a long time - you are damaging your eyes. Futhermore, it will be very dangerous for your back, your aims, legs If you watching TV too much. The last and most important effects is children who can be influenced by violent film. Therefore, personality of them will growth toward nagative . Lack of comunication skills is a challenge of themself . Consequently, they have some problems with psychology. To sum up, TV is something we can't do without in our life, but the parent should teach them the way to choose an appropriate channel.
kieulinhbs
Jun 9, 2013
Writing Feedback / Learning English through Social Issue - Teen Smoking [3]
Nowadays, it is not common for smoking in Hong Kong. Undoubtedly, there are many demerits for this phenomenon. It is a popular trend among to smoking. School children as young as eight smoking and almost all secondary schools have student smoker. Hence, it is virtually rewarding to rethink the cons of smoking. In the article, we are going to explore the caused, the cons and the solutions. Let's look at the reasons behind the serious trend of smoking.
There are a few common reasons why young are smoking.The firstThe first reason is problems from family. Troubled homes makes youngmake the young feel lack of concern and lose sense of belonging. The same applyapplies to the situation of facing difficulties at school. Teenagers will also turn to smoking to escape their problemof their problem .
Another reason of teenagers being tempted to smoking problem is that they are curious towards smoking, when anyone in their peer group smoking, they will be irresistible to the temptation, thereby smoking the road of no return.WithBy the cause of teenage idols being found towith smoking, like Eason Chan, teenagers will be influenced to think that smoking is trendy. This is another reason that teenagers are prone to smoking.
With such a sharp increase, we are worrying about the effects brought bysmokersmokers . To start with, smoking worsens family relationship. Most of parent are oppose smoking so there child smoking, they would argue.
At school, the effects of smoking are also serious. They cannot catch up with their study. Instead, they always sleep in the lesson. And also, manysmokersmokers smoking around the road so we were polluted.
Tackling such climbing rate of teenager smoking needs no further delay. First, they should join more family gatherings and speak their minds, shows more understanding. It is parents' responsibilitytofor have more communication with their children and get more about their life. Furthermore , they can learn to relax such as playing ball games with friends , taking a rest or drawing.
To conclude, I would say that the disadvantages far outweigh the advantages. So,Don't try itdon't try it on !
There are a few common reasons why young are smoking.
Another reason of teenagers being tempted to smoking problem is that they are curious towards smoking, when anyone in their peer group smoking, they will be irresistible to the temptation, thereby smoking the road of no return.
With such a sharp increase, we are worrying about the effects brought by
At school, the effects of smoking are also serious. They cannot catch up with their study. Instead, they always sleep in the lesson. And also, many
Tackling such climbing rate of teenager smoking needs no further delay. First, they should join more family gatherings and speak their minds, shows more understanding. It is parents' responsibility
To conclude, I would say that the disadvantages far outweigh the advantages. So,
kieulinhbs
Jun 7, 2013
Writing Feedback / 'Thank you God for those gifts' - friendship essay [11]
Friend like treea tree the seed in the soil even though bad conditions and storms that are exposed they grow so hard and became a strong tree so the friends with the bad state of affairs the relation grow, become strong and close with each other.
kieulinhbs
Jun 7, 2013
Writing Feedback / 'Thank you God for those gifts' - friendship essay [11]
Friends are good and gift a gift from god to our life to be happy and support us under all conditions
kieulinhbs
Jun 7, 2013
Writing Feedback / Difference between Two Close friends [8]
Uhm. Thank you very much. It is very useful for me. How can I writing English as well as you?
Uhm. Thank you very much. It is very useful for me. How can I writing English as well as you?
kieulinhbs
Jun 3, 2013
Writing Feedback / Difference between Two Close friends [8]
Does it have any mistake? Please, correct it for me!
Does it have any mistake? Please, correct it for me!
kieulinhbs
May 29, 2013
Writing Feedback / Difference between Two Close friends [8]
In high school, I have two close friends but they are dissimilar at characters and externality. They are Thao and Hang Ball ( Ball is the nickname). We are classmates and becoming close friends at 10 - grade. About externality, it is likely that Hang Ball is more beautiful than thou with white skin and black long hair. But on the hand, Thao is cute and lovely. She has black skin and short hair, so many people is impressed by her at first time. [..]
In high school, I have two close friends but they are dissimilar at characters and externality. They are Thao and Hang Ball ( Ball is the nickname). We are classmates and becoming close friends at 10 - grade. About externality, it is likely that Hang Ball is more beautiful than thou with white skin and black long hair. But on the hand, Thao is cute and lovely. She has black skin and short hair, so many people is impressed by her at first time. [..]
