Writing Feedback / Choosing and wearing clothes by high school students [7]

TOEFL High shcool students should wear school uniforms or not ?

Choosing and Wearing cloth is an essential part of our life. Being a student in high school, the most part of their lives is study although, we should also have our autonomy to decide what to wear to school.

First, requiring students to wear uniforms, which makes them have the same appearance, is not an appropriate way to cultivate student's individuality. People usually show their personality in wearing cloth, we can guess whether he is an outgoing person or a serious person by the way the dresses himself. However wearing in the same way makes students loosing their self-conscious gradually and limits their creativity.

Contrarily, deciding what to wear themselves is a way to inspire their passion to life, as a young girl, I like to chose the cloth myself. Getting a new graceful dress refreshes me, making me feel better in school life. Thus, it is a kind of entertainment for me.

Second, the quality of school uniforms always poor. Schools usually find economical companies to make uniforms that with high quantity but low quality. When I was a junior high school students, the uniform I wore in winter could not met the need of keeping warm, and setting in the cold classroom with thin cloth made me felt terrible. What's more, students are less likely to wear uniforms in out, which makes uniforms not economic. And purchasing different uniforms for accommodating growing children and changing seasons lead to extra cost for families.

Although, some authorities claims that wearing in the same clothing is a safe strategy of keeping terrorists away since it is obvious to recognize a new people in campus. People who want to harm students with intention can also get a same uniform or just pretend a school faculty. It is not an effective way to protect students from harms.

In short, considering the cost and utility, and other factors, students should decide their clothing themselves.

Writing Feedback / TOEFL Government is not necessary since we can redress many problems by our own. [5]

With the high-speed develpement and the increasingly cutting-egded technology infuse in our lifes, our living condition become much better, and many problems have been resolved by our own and with the help of friedns and familys. It seems like that the government plays an unobvious role in the society, but the truth is, there are countless problems can only be redressed by our government.

First and foremost, we humanbeings have been trough a lot from the natural disease, and new disease always here no matter how complete the bio-technique is. Last year, H1N9, a new infection widespreaded in China, and with the quick respondance and efficient resolvments, the horrible disease was controlled well. We can not prevent ourselves safely without the help from our government and those works can only be done by a huge sophisticated government system.

Not only the disease, but also the natraul catastrophe troubls us. A big volcanic eruption happened in Iceland in 2010, which due to problems in airline of the whole Europ. One of my friend study in Italy and traveld in Iceland at that time, and he could not back to Italy by air on time. And finally, the airplane company get the help from government and make the airline runs normally through a huge job on resolving the vocanic cloud. What can we friends do to him to help him back Italy at that time ? The answer is, nothing.

What is more, many social problems call for the interfering from our government. Recent years in China, many food safety problems emerges, for instand, Sanlu, a famous milk production company, produced the toxic milk powder that due to a terrible socicial effects, made people afriad about chosing food production. And Chinese government then enacts many strict laws to controll the food company and ensure the safety of food production, which makes civilians feel much comfortable in taking food production.

In short, we can not have a better life aqulity without the help of our government, even if we do redress lots of trubles by our own, which are so tiny compared with the government's efforts.

Writing Feedback / TOEFL/ Do you agree that professional athletes deserve high salaries ? [8]

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Countless sports celebrities show on the TV, attend many social activities, they work more than training, and they get their pays incredibly higher than common people. Many thought it is too unfair, they, like Byrant Kobe and David Beckham, just do some training and get the opportunity to shine, it seems like esay, and how can they get so much benefits? In my view, they deserve the high salaries, and the reasons will be strengthen below.

Initially, they have enormous stress, physically, mentally and emotionally. Notable swimmer Micael Phelps, who won countless gold medal and world records, trained in swimming since 6, admittedly, he has great talent-his dolphin-like body shape, the slim arms and legs, but unlike our ordinaries, he works not only based on his talent, but also his stringent training which can not be accepted by us. Phelps soak in the pool everyday, trains in different phrases, from low pace to high pace.He pushes himself so hard and have a little amount of rest even when Chrismas day falls on his schedule.

What's more, they can be injured anytime, which means they are risking their life. Once Kobe, playing in championship, fell down in ground when he jumped and crash on someone, hurted his spine. It was a fatal hurt for a sportsman and can even kills them. Although Kobe has healed, he has to watch out in every competition, and go for therapy regularly, which also costs a great amout of money.

Beside, high salaries are essential for sportsman because they can only get their high salaries in a short period. When they get aged, when they have no more energy to training and win, they will lose their benefits. Compared with our ordinary people, how can work throughout our life, it is not that unfair.