Writing Feedback / IELTS:Some people believe that there should be fixed punishment for each crime type [6]

Topic: Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime.Others,however,argue that the circumstances of an individual crime,and the motivation for committing it,should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment.

Generally reason behind punishment is to reduce the crime from a nation and to build a fear in the mind of offenders. Some people think that it does not matter what is reason behind committing a crime therefore there should be fixed punishment for a specific crime. Alternatively I believe that it should taken into consideration the situation and conditions, that forces to a person to be a criminal.

First of all if there will be a fixed punishment for each type of crime then it will lead to increase the crime because the punishment will be clear in the mind of professional criminals and they will not feel fear while committing a crime. Secondly, laws and rules are there for people therefore it is necessary to have a look behind crime for instance "a women steals feed for her child should be treated same as a women, who steals for her drug addiction". The person who committed crime first time and the professional criminals should not be imprisoned at same place.

On the contrary, fixed punishment will reduce the time taken by judges to give their judgement and it will be effective economically for the Government. Everyone should be treated equally because sometimes we see that a poor person who do not have much money for hiring a good lawyer they get imprisoned even without committing a crime and when they come back to the society they become a professional criminal. Therefore fixed punishment will reduce the space between poor and rich people and everyone will understand the importance of each other.

To conclude, Government should decide for punishment case by case basis. In doing so crime can be eliminated from a nation and it is a responsibility of every individual to be in the favor of truth and respect the laws of our constitution.

Writing Feedback / IELTS;Talents with which people are born or practice is more beneficial. [7]

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I am Talwinder
I am preparing for IELTS
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Topic: "It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or a musician."

Talent is a quality which influences our personality.Some people says that talent is a God gift and God gives it to very special and lucky people.Where-as the second way to become a successful person is hard work and practice.In my personal perspective,I believe that Hard work,will and motivation is a better way to be a good sports man or a musician.

First of all, hard work is a key to hols success. We think that some people are more talented and that is why they are very successful in their life but the fact is that we do not know about their hard word and sacrifices behind their success.For instance the most successful athlete from India till date named as "Milkha Singh", he won 77 races out of 80 throughout his career moreover he broke the world record of 400 meters and everybody knows these records but nobody knows that he used to practice very hard and do not stops running till blood comes out from his mouth.Therefore everything is possible by practice and hard work.

On the other hand, God gifted talents are possible in singing only because a singer must have a sweet voice and it cannot be improved by practice. Moreover there is a need of a training to improve the control on voice and breath.

In nutshell, Inbuilt talent has very less effective than practice. Nobody is perfect in this world and to make them perfect training by experts can play a vital role to be a good sports man or a successful person in the world.