Undergraduate / "The whole is greater than the sum of it"; 263 word -myself and diversity! [8]

Thank you!
But i kind of, sort of do :)
And no :( it has like 57%-ish but i heard that it's getting more selective this year

Letters / Excellent character and strong personality - My Recommendation Letter [5]

This seems good. I really like how you provide details and not just list things!

Undergraduate / My Room; Common App Essay. PROMPT "Describe a place or environment where you are content" [6]

This is a very good essay! I feel so incompetent compared to this, haha! Hope you're not applying to UMD because I'll have a fierce competition!

(Can you read mine and critique, please?)

Undergraduate / "The whole is greater than the sum of it"; 263 word -myself and diversity! [8]

Gahhh, thank you! Yes, that's what I thought about that paragraph too, but I don't know how to improve it, haha. Hopefully, my teacher will help a bit.

Undergraduate / I like to think that I'm just here; COMMON APP: Past, Present, and Future [2]

I wouldn't know how to describe myself ((no comma here) in the sense of usual identified traits. When it comes to the way I see myself, I like to think that I'm just here. Here, thinking thoughts that I don't think other's think. I think a lot, I don't know why, but I do. They say our life is best lived forward and best understood when lived backwards. I look back to see moments, and events in my life simply because I want to understand why everything happened the way it did. I have no control now even though I wish I did. I look at what I have now and I see an improvement in my outlook and my perspective on everything.

September 24, 2013. It is 8:13PM on a quiet Tuesday night. My mind is a bundle of knots and ropes. I, along with many aspiring college students are contemplating about their future plans. It is absurd to me that around this age we are pressured to decide what we will be doing for the rest of our lives. I'll be honest; I am not afraid of what the future holds. Frankly, I am not afraid of anything, except for time. I am looking back at my life, and I can't seem to remember half of it. Not even half of half of it. Which saddens me, because time moves so fast even though a second seems so long. It is 8:28PM and I am mentally making a list of the things that I've haven't done, and probably won't have time to do. Things I've haven't said, and probably never will. I don't mean to sound morbid, it's just that at any given moment my journey may reach its destination with no warning, because time is always one step ahead of me.

Early February, 2009. I was in the midst of sleeping until I was unexpectedly woken up by my parents at 4AM to the news of my grandmother's death. I was not in shock, in fact I felt emotionless. Rather than getting ready for school that morning, my brother and I were preparing ourselves for an 8620 miles restless flight. The plane ride was treacherously long, as well as the whole month of February that we stayed in Tra Vinh, Vietnam. For such a hot place that averages 90° year round; Vietnam sure felt cold. Looking back, my grandmother was always by my side, regardless of her ability to speak or walk because she was paralyzed from the waist down. For someone who was incapable of doing many things, she made sure I had everything. I was young. I was insensitive. Not once did I ever tell you that I love you or that I was grateful for everything you've done for me. I am sorry I have never learned to hold on to anyone but myself. Even if I wanted to ask you to stay, the only word that would crawl out of my mouth was goodbye.(I did not thank her for what she had done ... blahblah something like that. don't use you, use her

September, 1999. My 3 year old self is getting ready for her first day of preschool, going with mixed emotions, ranging from excitement to anxiety. Her mind is a bundle of knots and ropes. She, along with many 3 year olds are worried about what's to come, and if they are prepared to begin their journey of independence. To make decisions on their own without the help of their parents. In this moment she is scared of the future, and the unknown, but she knows she has plenty of time before the future arrives.

It is 9:17PM, and I am over thinking again.

I absolutely love the beginning! But ending, i don't know. sounds kind of random b/c after your grandma's death you jump to your preschool. I understand what you're trying to do, but maybe put one or two sentence to make that clear. Anyway, love this essay! it's very creative!

Undergraduate / I hope to lead an academically demanding life; WHY GEORGIA TECH ? [7]

variety of extracurricular activities, and intellectual student body that I was looking for (put comma between and )

Gatech struck me as what?? i know you're struggling with word count, put throw in some good adjective in there!

join organizations such as: Club Math, to meet others that arethrilled (i don't think that thrilled is a good word in here with the beauty of mathematics like i am ; Acts Of Kindness (what does this organization do? you describe all of the clubs but not this? ; the Human Development Organization to tackle problems in the world; the Swim Club to compete for Gatech , and C.H.E.F.S. to continue inventing and sharing recipes.

Overall a good essay, but needs a little work. I know you're tight with word count but there are some errors in grammar and such. Try talking to your english teacher, if you have one

And help me too, haha, if you have time!

Undergraduate /  I'am from a very small and poor town in Peru; Registered Nursing Program [3]

I really like the essay, but I suggest that you revise it for some grammatical errors.
"To make matters worse I had no car, which made getting to and from, both work and school very difficult however, with the help of the New Jersey Transit I was able to make it everywhere on time"

This sentence would be better like this:
To make matters worse I had no car, which made getting to and from, both work and school, very difficult; however, with the help of the New Jersey Transit I was able to make it everywhere on time

Again, I like the essay, but I found other punctuation errors like this, so revise it and you'll be golden :)
Good Luck!