Undergraduate / My Passion for Communication (Writing Sample for RISD) [2]

My main concern is whether there is a concrete/clear illustration of my passion of communication (in addition to acknowledging its importance.) And whether this writing sample makes sense in response to the prompt. And of course any other thing that should be perfected. ANY comments are welcomed and appreciated! Thank you!

PROMPT: Is there something you love, have to do, can't stop thinking about? Write about a personal passion or obsession other than visual art or design.

Communication
The successes in my life are the results of acknowledgements from others. Not only were the people supportive of my motivations, but their words were the keys to my motivated attitude. The gestures of communication- whether it's through text, physical forms, or technology- plays a dominate role in my life as each step I take are influenced by these messages given and received. As a result, I am passionate about communication.

Mothers all around the world communicate to their children in different ways of love, expressing their support and showing their encouragements through language and physical gestures. As a child of many doubts, my mother has always communicated important messages to me. These "important messages," in her belief, sets a mental foundation in my life. Consequently, I can grasp onto these messages whenever I am doubtful or vulnerable in addition to her communicating with me on a daily basis. She has showed me that communicating to one another has the advantage of telling others what is on one's mind. More importantly, telling others that they are cared for.

My passion for communication has helped me understand myself in addition to learning about other unique individuals. As many ways of communication are given, graphic design fits into my larger obsession with communication. Graphic design is a great tool to expand ideas in addition to visually communicating messages to the world. Not only does it offer opportunities in marketing, but conveying crucial messages through visual communication. As a student who is passionate about giving out the right messages, I hope to gain knowledge from the excellent school of design to achieve my long-term objectives as a visual communicator.

Undergraduate / The Little Boy Who Showed Me How to Live;Something I love,have to do,can't stop think [2]

PROMPT: Is there something you love, have to do, can't stop thinking about? Write about a personal passion or obsession other than visual art or design.

I have been the youngest among my family members through the first sixteen years of my life. The thought of approaching a younger child, or even trying to interact with one never crossed my mind. In the spring of the year 2010, I signed up for an extracurricular activity that allowed me to socialize with disabled children from a local Chinese orphanage. I was certain that this would not be a trained experience for me. All I could think about was to get my curriculum out of the way.

When the orphanage arrived at our school's front gate, I hesitated for a moment and attempted to step forward as I inhaled and exhaled slowly. This boy, as physically challenged as he might have seemed, rushed to my sight and stopped. He smiled at me and said, "hi" as I smiled and led him to the cafeteria for lunch. I felt a sudden fear and awkward feeling with the reason that I finally have the responsibility to look after someone younger than me. A rush of motivative feeling went through my mind, and encouraged myself to take well care of this child for the day.

We played ball at the school gym after lunch. He looked at me and said that this experience was the best he ever had. Although he was a juvenile still maturing to his teens, I realized how Fortune was viewed differently among different people-I was a teenager who lived in a jar of honey her whole life, yet she could not see how lucky she was to have a healthy body and soul. This little boy showed me his super inner being, transmitting an energy to me that later became a motivative obsession for the rest of my life.

My obsession became my passion that day, as my passion was to live like the boy-focused on the glass half full. This passion still remains today, and it will forever be remembered through my experience with this little boy who could not help but smile at each moment we spent together.

(I am concerned that this may not be on topic... I'm also concerned about my grammatical errors in this essay, or things that may sound a little awkward. Please help, thank you!)

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