Writing Feedback / Will traditional skills die off due to technological advancement? [6]

In the past few decades, technology has developed dramatically and has had a big impact on people's traditional skills and ways of life. Some argue that the significant impact makes it spotless to put an effort on keeping traditional skills and lifestyle a life. However, I believe the economic competition between the countries is so high that makes it hard for traditional skills and way of life to survive

In today's world of economic race, every countries first priority is the growth of economy. Technology has been the major factor in economic growth. With the help of technology company produces cheaper and better quality products it leads growth of economy. Therefore, every country wants to have the best technology in order to keep in the economic race. These competition forces the traditional skills and life style to die. For example, before the industry revolution companies manufactured products by hands, and it was time taking and expensive. But as technology progressed slowly machines replaced hand workers as result the company's become more productive and profited more.

Furthermore, technology has mad the life people very convenient. For example, in past the common way of communication was either faces to face or sending later by post that took long time to reach the destination. But today people communicate online, through e-mail, Facebook and mobile phone.

In conclusion, the advancement of technology and economical race between the countries makes it pointless to hold tight with traditional skills and ways of life. It would be better to improve technological skills and lifestyle.

Writing Feedback / IELTS; Some people argue that smoking should be made illegal. [5]

Negative health effects of smoking are enormous and today it has become a serious health issue as it causes untreatable diseases and death of thousands of people. In spite of that, the number of people becoming addicted to smoking is increasing rapidly specially among the teenagers. Thus, some people argue that smoking should be made illegal.

In recent year smoking has become very popular particularly among teenagers, and should be banned. The number teenagers becoming addicted to smoke is heavily increasing. Furthermore, smoking causes serious health problems. For example, smoking is the main factor causing lung cancer. Now, some people argue that it is personal choice, and everybody can do whatever they want their lives and bodies. However, when it comes to smoking, it somehow affects not only the smokers but others as well. In fact money teenagers are affected by people smoking around them. For example, your friends smoke and sometime smoke to be like their friends or to be accepted in the company your friends. Moreover, many of them are affected at home. Even though, many parents do not allow their underage teens to smoke but if the elders smoke, especially parents, teens learn from it and sneak to smoke without being caught.

Furthermore, many teens becoming addicted to smoking out of curiosity. When a 16 years old teenager see a man and women smoking around the corner or in the bus stop, it becomes a motivation for teens to experiment smoke, and that experiment may turns out to become a life time addiction.

In conclusion, an increasing number of teens becoming addicted to smoking and if nothing is done to prevent their addiction to smoking, they will have serious diseases in the future and the only way to decline the number is to make smoking illegal.