Writing Feedback / [IELTS] Does a celebrity benefit society or not? (Cambridge IELTS 9 G1 Task2) [2]

It is a dream of each individual to become a celebrity during the entire life. Undoubtedly, famous people are dazzle and rich in society, however, public are now starting to concern about the problems which may cause by them. For my view, I personally agree that more benefits are generated from celebrities.

Simply, wealthy life and social reputations are the most basic aspects for a famous person living in societies. And these two fundamental elements could be a role model for citizens and also promote the development of the human race. With admiration, people who are struggling in their career may generate positive energy to approach higher life aims. Further more, to be a role model, celebrities may bring more professional acts in their field because of the pressures from the universe. To maintain their reputations, celebrities should make great efforts on their careers. More qualified entertainment will be published for citizens as a consequence, which certainly could improve the spiritual conditions.

On the contrary, negative effects may appear when the number of celebrities is increasing. It is very had to change the personality of one person, and being famous may lead it to an incorrect state, and then cause some community problems. For example, Xiaosong Gao, a song editor and famous director in China, caught by the police under the name of drunken driving. The news was published by medias and discussed in the public due to his undesirable behavior. On the other hand, too many wealthy people may enlarge the gap between the wealthy people and the needys. Poor families may hate those millionaires who live a luxury and dissipation life, therefore even more criminals occur.

As those two sides mentioned above, I admit the celebrity effect is the double-edged sword. Pros and cons can hardly separate from it. 'Great power comes with great responsibility', the whole society still needs numerous celebrities to establish the positive image and devote beneficial activities to public.

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Writing Feedback / [IELTS] Unpaid community service and its role in high school programs [5]

Cambridge IELTS 9, TEST 2

Unpaid Service for the Good of Community

The appropriate education methods have been discussed in academia for decades. It is said students should be involved in unpaid community services as a compulsory part of high school programmes. As a matter of fact, plenty of students, including undergraduate, participate in charities, community services and company internships before their graduations at present. For my point of view, I am totally agree with it.

By joining in some volunteer activities, students could be benefited from the processes during the serving, such as social relationships. Generally, those services provide the chance which can help the graduating students face to society in their earlier ages. Charities may teach students how to help the needy, and spread blesses without the form of money. Helping neighbours and guiding pupils are the effective way to enhance their sociability. On the other hand, more meaningful allocation of time schedules will be deployed during those programmes for each students. They could spend their times on helping others rather than staying at home with TV games or Internet chattings. It is a positive approach to drag them to outdoor activities, at least for their health.

Additionally, a compulsory school programmes could also share some youth problems. An earlier investigation in U.S. indicates that the juvenile crime rate was reduced from 11.6% to 6.3% around the year 2000, for the reason of compulsory labours. Fear, anxiety and loneliness are common problems for the youth who may feel rejected by society. But successful completion of community service can give young offenders a sense of accomplishment from doing things that benefit their communications, it can promote self-confidence and self-esteem in them as well. Those elements are the main contributions which help to reform them into responsible and productive members of society.

Overall, compulsory programmes for school students are the kernel factors to shape students' world views before they enter societies. It is challenging policies for government, but a win-win methods for both students and communities.

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