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rinori89   
Nov 28, 2013
Undergraduate / "What it Takes to be a Pioneer" -- UC Transfer Essay [3]

It is pretty good! I would just try to make more paragraphs. you have to develop one paragraph for the introduction, a few for the body, and the last one for your conclusion. Hope it helps!
rinori89   
May 16, 2009
Writing Feedback / Mercutio's importance to the plot and theme - Romeo and Juliet [5]

In general your essay sounds good but the last paragraph is too short. In a normal-length essay a paragraph is four to six sentences long.

So you have to add more sentences to that paragraph. Furthmore, your last paragraph is not a solid conclusion.
rinori89   
May 12, 2009
Research Papers / Kosovo's independence--government class research paper [4]

Hello guys, I am supposed to make a long project on Kosovo's independence, a state somewhere in Europe. I did some research and wrote this paper.

It is very long to read but read as long as you can.
I have to turn it in on Friday.
Warm regards

Is it true that there is no legal basis for the independence of Kosova?
With Kosovo being so much in the news, many people are scrambling to learn something real about the history of Kosovo and its way to becoming an independent state. According to the history of the Balkans, Kosovo has not been part of a Slavic tribe-it was mainly lived by Illyrians (Albanians). Kosovo for a long time was under the control of different empires but mainly under the Ottoman Empire from the end of the fourteenth century till the end of the nineteenth century. In 1389 a terrible battle happened in Kosovo between Serbian and Ottoman Empire. Serbians created a myth about this battle which closely relates them to Kosovo even though they were defeated by "the Turks" [ ]. Serbia sees Kosovo as a religious place which belongs to Serbia only. After the fall of the Ottoman Empire, Serbians illegally occupied Kosovo in 1912. Since that year till 1999 Serbia discriminated Albanians based on their religions, political opinions, and ethnic groups. Overall, the main reasons why Kosovo now is an independent state are because Serbia violated human rights, denied the ability of Albanians to exercise their right to self-determination, and the access to decision making process.

The only country that has had a legitimate rule over Kosovo has been the Socialist Federal Republic of Yugoslavia (SFRY). In light of the fact that Kosovo has never been legally incorporated into the republic of Serbia, Serbia may have no claim to sovereignty over Kosovo and can make no claim of territorial integrity. Kosovo's independence will in no way be in contradiction with international law. The foreign minister of Russia, Sergay Lavrov, said: "borders should be changed only by agreement. Since there is no agreement there should be no recognition of Kosovo's independence". In fact it was Serbia that acted in contradiction with international law in 1912 when it annexed Kosovo through military occupation after its aggression against the Ottoman Empire. In other words Kosovo's independence is legal; Kosovo participated in the governance of the SFRY, which is now broken, but not in that of Serbia [ ].

If a country denies its people the right to self-determination, that country has the right to be separated from that governing state. Self-determination principle is an internationally accepted legal principle which challenges the principle of territorial integrity because it is the will of the people that makes a state legitimate. The international law supports the proposition that territorial integrity and sovereignty of a government is entitled to be respected only so long as it respects the equal rights and interests of the whole population to the territory[ ]. But Serbia especially during the Milosevic regime denied Albanians the right of self-determination. It ruled Kosovo's people in a similar way to that of Adolph Hitler with Jewish people. In 1980 when Milosevic came to power he took away the autonomy of Kosova which was given before and gained control over social, economic, and educational policy in Kosovo. Serbia did not entitled to an unlimited right of self-determination.

Most sovereign states do not recognize the right to self-determination through secession in their constitutions. Many expressly forbid it [ ]. However, there are several existing models of self-determination through greater autonomy. Kosovo had suffered quite a lot in the first two decades of Tito's Yugoslavia, when the notorious tyrant Alexander Rankovic was Yugoslav interior minister. Repression was fierce, even the Albanian language was restricted, and Serbs ran just about all the local government positions. Albanian people is one of the people in the Balkans that suffered the most. Many times they were not allowed even to speak Albanian or listen to an Albanian radio station. So even during the period of autonomy, Albanians continued to be second-class citizens. For example, in the United States, despite the formal equality which blacks and Hispanics now have, they fill the jails and the gas chambers. In Yugoslavia, despite the formal guarantees for Albanians, the same thing happens. Repression for demonstrations would include the questioning of tens of thousands of Albanian Kosovars, and long prison sentences were common. Albanians seem to have been heavily overrepresented in the ranks of political offenders, such as teenagers sentenced to jail for shouting "Long live the Republic of Kosovo!" And it is notable that almost half of the 35 cases of capital punishment during 1975-1985 were carried out against Albanians. However, the number of official executions is extremely small besides the number of Kosovars killed by the security forces . So, all of these mistreatments and the violation of self-determination right by Serbia resulted in making Kosovo independent.

A large number of Serbs did leave Kosovo not because of any campaign to push Serbs out of Kosovo but Serbs felt uncomfortable living in Kosovo. This makes us understand that there was a low standard of living, much lower than elsewhere in Serbia or Yugoslavia, just as people in other parts of Yugoslavia migrated from one place to another in search of better conditions. Many Albanians too migrated away from Kosovo in order to find work elsewhere in Yugoslavia or even in Germany or the United States; although they tended to maintain their ties with Kosovo and send money back home (similar to how Mexican toilers seek work in the U.S. in order to keep their families afloat). Albanians were obliged to join Serbian military for more than a year. Many of them were killed by Serbians from behind and identified by the military that they committed suicide. So many Albanians had two choices: to join Serbian military and die or leave Kosovo.

In 1990 the Alliance of Independent Trade Unions of Kosovo was founded, which was supposed to develop a fund to support unemployed Albanian workers. But it was closed after a while. During this year Serbia prohibited the sale of property of Albanians, outlawed the Albanian language newspapers, and closed the Kosovo Academy of science. Albanian cultural institutions were either closed down, or put under Serbian management and purged of their Albanian content. Albanian-language radio and TV stations were closed down. Theater, ballet and museums were also affected, and the material in the National Library was pruned. There was a passion to Serbianize place names in Kosovo; even the name of the province itself was changed, becoming once again "Kosovo and Metohija", a name irritating to Albanians. And especially, there was a Serbianization of the schools. A uniform school curriculum was decreed for all Serbia and made compulsory in Kosovo; as might be expected, it downgraded the Albanian language and culture. Knowledge of Serbo-Croatian was made compulsory as a prerequisite for secondary education in Kosovo. Albanians were much likely in the position as black people were in America. Albanians had to greet Serbian people and stay in good term with them. Once you disagree with a Serb you were considered a "terrorist" and you had to deal with serious consequences-jail.

Ten years ago the Serbian state-capitalist government stepped up the ethnic cleansing of Kosovo, burning villages and towns, and massacring Albanian Kosovars. This is their long-expected spring offensive, and it is a horrible crime against humanity. Serbia exercised oppressive rule over Kosovo through a series of civil and human abuses. These abuses were just the beginning of Milosevic regime in Kosovo. Through successive decrees made by the Republic of Serbia, thousands of Serbs moved to Kosovo to create ethnically clean Serb-only community. In response to this, "Kosovo Liberation Army" (KLA) was created. Then Serbs began a campaign to destroy KLA; in fact they just started killing and massacring civilians. Approximately one million Albanians were expelled from Kosovo by Serbs . Serbs severely violated human rights and international law. Furthermore, Serbia began the genocide in Kosovo. Many political leaders of powerful states in Europe accepted the existence of genocide in Kosovo, including the German defense secretary Rudolf Sharping , and his British counterpart Gorge Robertson . So NATO in accordance with some Security Council resolutions decided to bomb Serbian military targets in order to stop the genocide, human rights violation, and ethnic cleansing.

On the basis of these arguments and facts, the new political legal and international status of Kosovo should be the equivalent, without any doubt, with independence and sovereignty with internationally recognized personality in all of its territory. Now we see that Kosovo has arguments and facts to present before the International Court of Justice. Kosovo has never been legally part of Serbia. It was occupied by Serbia after the fall of the Ottoman Empire. Serbia denied Albanians the right to self-determination, which led them to deep and severe discriminations. Albanians did not have access to decision making process of the Serbian government. The violation of human rights made Albanians suffer for the whole life. The deep rooted conflict with Serbs caused many of them to stay away from Kosovo; otherwise they will get massacred. During the last decade 1990-2000 many of them were not allowed even to speak Albanian publicly. Furthermore, the intention of Serbian government was to assimilate Albanian language, culture, and traditions. According to those arguments, the declaration of Kosovo's independence is legal and does not contradict with the international law.

May 10, 2009 Done by: Rinor Zuka
rinori89   
May 7, 2009
Letters / Rinor: My first CV for a job application [6]

Thank you Notoman, EF_Sean, elzbietabielec, michaelfrye1970. Your advices really help me to rebuild my CV.
I do appreciate your time working on my CV.

Sincerely
rinori89   
Apr 26, 2009
Writing Feedback / TOEFL essay - PR: from-books knowledge and experiential knowledge [6]

In conclusion , both from-books knowledge and experiential knowledge have their own benefits. However, I put more appreciation toward from-books knowledge. This source is not only voluminous but also having many fundamental things which are the core to build our own experiential knowledge on.

you do not have to say "in conclusion". It is obvious that your last paragraph is your conclusion, so why do you have to say "in conclusion".

My English teacher would mark it as incorrect.

Bye
rinori89   
Apr 26, 2009
Letters / Rinor: My first CV for a job application [6]

I would be very grateful to you if you can read my Resume.
Please tell me if i did any error with my writing. Thank you for getting time.

(CV)
Nme *****
address ****
Tel no. *****
Email address ******
Career objective:
- To obtain a job as a translator at the American Army Base "Bondsteal"

Environmental science skills:
- Wrote four research papers based on environmental issues: "Effects of global warming on living things": "Deforestation: why do we need to prevent it": "Why lots of different species on earth are listed as endangered species, including Green Turtles": "The Rain Forests: why do we need them"

- I suggested a project to the Ministry of Forests in **** to protect rural fields throughout *****.

Education:
- I attended a medical high school "*****" for two years.
- Now 12th grader at ******, (an American School).
- Course work: Chemistry, American Government, English 4, Creative Writing, Physics, Math (Pre-Calculus), and World History.
- High school graduation certificate, May 2009.
- Expected graduation Grade Point Average: 3.90 to 4.00.

Communication skills:
- According to some personality tests in Psychology my personality is agreeableness, which means I am an easy going, friendly, and cooperative person in everyday life.

- Team worker, participated in scouting events.
- Worked in the Medical Clinic in Vitia and developed my communications skills with patients.
- Excellent English language skills.

Voluntary work:
- Worked more than two weeks in a Family Medicine Clinic in Vitia, each day seven hours.
- Went to a kindergarten in Prishtina to take care of kids; I spent more that 25 hours there which gave me credits at school for voluntary work.

- Participated in cleaning the mountain close to the school.
- Recently I made a commitment to tutor some Roma, Ashkali, and Egyptian Children till the end of this school year.
(If we calculate those voluntary work hours, we will get more than 100 voluntary work hours).
- Experienced the job as a translator, staying with U.S soldiers in my community and being a student of an American high school.

April 7, 2009 Done by: *******
rinori89   
Apr 26, 2009
Writing Feedback / Financial anaysis essay (cash flows) [5]

Hey abby, according to my reading your conclusion is great.
Maybe somebody else who is involved in business may give you a better explanation of that.

Good job

Bye
rinori89   
Apr 26, 2009
Book Reports / "the right stuff" book report. [5]

I don't have time to read the whole essay, but i did read just the intoduction. It sounds great.

but Tom Wolfe, the author, prefers to focus on the personal lives of the pilots and astronauts, on their wives, hardships of their lives and their thoughts and concerns.

Sincerely
rinori89   
Apr 26, 2009
Undergraduate / Goal setting is a powerful process; U Tirana/ AUBG (Broaden my global perspective) [4]

Hey guys I am not a native speaker of English language and i make a lot of grammar mistakes.
Could you please read my essay and tell me what I should change? Thank you

How an education at AUBG will broaden my global perspective to cultivate capacity for social responsibility

Goal setting is a powerful process for thinking about your ideal future, and motivating yourself to turn your personal goals into reality. The better education you get the more comfortable life you have. In many cases academic achievements, personal interests, and life experiences represent who a student really is. A suitable University like AUBG complements my needs to turn my goals into reality, and will broaden my global perspective to cultivate capacity for social responsibility.

AUBG is a well known University in Southeastern Europe. It has a vast diversity of students. Thus, in this University I will meet many students who come from different parts of Europe with whom I can exchange ideas and try to make positive contributions for a better global future. Those students have different ideas about Kosovo. My presence in this University will participate in making a better perspective about Kosovo and other neighboring countries' futures. AUBG is an English speaking environment, which will refine my ability to express my ideas and thoughts. In this way, I will be able to broaden my global perspective.

Some of the courses AUBG offers will sharpen my ability to have a successful career in Business and get a productive job to keep my family. It is not only me who is going to benefit from being a student of AUGB, but also my native country. The Economy of Kosovo, as well as other nations' are dependent on each other. In AUBG I will be surrounded by a number of students with whom I can debate in various business fields how to improve the Economic perspective of those countries. In this way, I'll have the chance to communicate and gain feedback about developments and achievements reached in Kosovo of which they may not be aware.

The question, "what am I going to be in future?" is not bothering only me, but also many high school students. As many high school students, I also want to have a suitable degree for my goals in future. I hope I can follow my future goals carefully and not stray from them. One of my goals that I set for myself is to do well in school. AUBG offers that undergraduate degree I am interested and I am sure that I will be surrounded by a faculty and staff who really cares for me to achieve my academic goals.

Another goal of mine is to get the training and education I need to perform any daily task. I have decided that I want to work in and around technology and business. I know that in order to fulfill my dreams I will have to put in a lot of hard work and time. Another goal of mine is to one day get married and have a few kids. If I get a good education and a stable job I will be pleased to be involved in a charity or other assisting organizations. I also want to participate in different economic fields in my native country which was ruined after the War of 1999. According to some of the research I did, AUBG is one of the Universities in Bulgaria which has the training and education to fulfill those dreams.

The first step and one of my goals toward a successful education is to enroll in AUBG, a University with diverse student body, which satisfies all of my needs to accomplish my goals in life. In AUBG I'll face many difficult tasks, but also be surrounded by a faculty and staff who are dedicated to helping me do well in school. The main purpose of business administration program in this school is to prepare students for entry-level management positions in a wide variety of business fields; this is also the degree I am interested. Thus, after studying for four years to receive this degree, I will broaden my global perspective and cultivate my capacity for social responsibility.
rinori89   
Apr 23, 2009
Writing Feedback / TOEFL Essay -Why go to university (career preparation, self-actualization) [7]

in conclusion, of many reasons for people to go to university or college, career preparation and self-actualization have been the most primary. And once at college environment, you are moving towards your dream accompanying with more respected, more confident, more excited...

If I used "in conclusion" in the last paragraph of my essay, my english teacher would mark it incorrect. She does not allowed me to do that, She says it is obvious that the last paragraph is the conclusion of your essay so why you have to say ' in the conclusion'.

Bye the rest of it was great
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