Undergraduate / CDs and Swiper - grammar/ MIT essay [2]

World you come from, and how it shaped your aspirations. 250 words
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Every important lessons of my Life I learned from Dora the explorer...
I grow up in typical kazakh family: parents working whole day to survive rather than live and 2-3 children. As my parents could not afford neither nannies nor kindergarten I spent my days at home watching tons of CDs. Among cartoons I had seen by my graphic I had my favourite one - Dora the explorer. Cheerful Latino girl with a love of embarking on quests related to an activity in which she would like to partake accompanied by her friends. "Are you ready?!" she pronounced and started travel to her goals overcoming any obstacles in her way caused by "Swiper" or other beings. In the every new series Dora introduced words in English and elements of Latin culture showing that World was getting smaller and smaller and that speaking foreign language is important. Yet more importantly by helping her friends and relatives to got out of challenges she inspired me to be helpful or useful in the community for others.

I've never before realized I had power to impact someone's life until I started visit orphanage. "With my English skills I don't have chances to get full scholarship". Keeping my friend's words with less fortunate opportunities I started educate him myself. After half of year working on his English he took test and surprisingly got high score which meant he was eligible for scholarship.

After witnessing myself making positive changes to others' lives, I've been determined to dedicate my life to make the World a better place, as Dora said "What I do is far more important than who I am."

Undergraduate / stage phobia - Essay for MIT - The most significant challenge you have faced [NEW]

The most significant challenge you have faced, and how you manage it 250 words

As soon as the month May came near almost every conversation was about the same topic. Student Government election incited a great deal of curiosity to every student at the school. As tenth grade student I had chance to be a candidate for an executive position that I had awaited for a long time. However something inside me rejected it. It was fear. Fear to loss again intimidated me. As I prepared my campaign for Secretary fear burned in the back of my mind and doubt whether I should continue my campaign. Eventually, I realized that if I wanted to reach my high school goal I should face challenge despite devouring fear inside and I had to consider my intimidation at the different perspective. My fear was merely an extra challenge driving me to go beyond what I already knew I was capable of. Soon enough, loss became a guide to execute each part of my campaign. Thereby, every poster or banner was improved until perfection. Yet, on the day of presentation I even forgot about my long held intimidation - stage phobia. Standing on the stage my habitual fear of speaking publically evaporated and was superseded by excitement to win and achieve my goal. With the courage, determination, and new outlook on my fear I successfully achieved my high school dream - position of Secretary. Through campaign, I learned important life lesson. No matter how many times I fall, far important how many times I get up!

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