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Name: Chengxu Ying
Joined: Apr 13, 2014
|Last Post: Apr 19, 2014
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/ IELTS: Canadian students graduated; 3 pharagraphs
Your total words is 160+, i think you could simplified some sentences such as
even though the number of female student graduated was always higher than the number of men
even though more females graduate from the university in the whole period(it is only male and female here )
the increasing trends of both groups of students seems as likely to be similar
they had a similar increasing trend
According to the given information,
/ IELTS TASK 2; More people want to buy famous brands. Give reason and opinion
This is an essay that i wrote for exercise just now, Please give me some recommendation on any aspects such as logic and sentences. Cheers
People preferred to buy cheap but good products several years ago. However, increasing number of people trend to pursue famous-brand items such as clothes, cars and cell phone. There are a few reason for this new development. However, I personally believe it is not a positive trend.
The following reasons lead to the pursuit for famous brand. One such reason is that it is believed those commodities are of good quality. Compared with the cell phone of other brands, people are willing to buy iphone for its multifunctional system and humanized design of operation. It also happens when people select clothes and cars. Apart from that, advertisement effect is another important factor which influences people's selection. Amount of companies spend millions of money on the advertisement by inviting celebrities in order to attract more customers. People, especially youngster, trend to buy to products which their idols recommended.
In my opinion, it is a negative development. Firstly, famous brands generally cost a lot. The cost of purchasing famous brands products such as clothes and bags are doubled even tripled for its designing and materials. By contrast, some ordinary products could be good substitutions with lower cost. Moreover, this trend may result in the increasing of criminal rate. Some robbers and kidnappers usually target people who is wealthy , especially those who wearing famous bands. The criminal are stimulated by the increasing use of famous brand because criminals believe these products worth much.
In conclusion, I believe people purchase famous-brand goods for different reasons while it is not a positive development.i appreciate that if you can grade my article.