Writing Feedback / [IELTS] schools should only teach children the academic subject [6]

Topic: school should teach children the academic subje cts which have a close relationship with their future careers, so other subjects like music and sports are not important.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?
People have many different views about what subjects should be taught in school. Although I accept that students have to study many subjects in school, I disagree with the idea that unimportant subjects such as music and sports should be got rid of the program.

Many people believe that students only need to study academic subjects like mathematics, physics because these subject are necessary for students' future. This is understandable when labor market now has high competition; students have to meet requirements regard of qualification. In addition, the unemployment rate is always high, so their parents want children to study these subjects which can help students have a job.

Although those above reasons are acceptable, I would argue that there are many things much more important than having a job. Firstly, studying music, art or sports is also very important to students. This enables students to develop their potentials through discovering the natural world around them. Secondly, to get a job in labor market, not only do students require hard skills but also soft skills such as teamwork, presentation. For instance, through taking part in a sport, students can understand team spirit and learn lessons about teamwork skills. Therefore, these subjects might fulfil the students' ability. Finally, children's future do not depend heavily on the academic subjects they study in school, it is the result of their efforts and capacity

In conclusion, although the academic subjects play a primary role in nurturing children, it seem to me that the effects of learning music, sports are profound.

Writing Feedback / How should children be taught? [6]

People have many arguments about how the children should be taught. While some people believe that parents should take responsibilities of teaching their children, some others argue that this responsibility belongs to the school. In my opinion, co-operation between parents and school would give much benefit to children.

On the one hand, parents are people who understand clearly and have the most influence on their children. Besides, each child has his own personality, habits and penchants, so each child needs nurturing with different methods. Because of the responsibilities of parenthood, parents would care for their children, look at their emotion, their dreams, as well as, help them face with difficulties in their life. In fact, the children grown up in happy families tend to be more successful than the children in emotionally unstable homes.

On the other hand, it can be denied that the effects of School on children are profound. Firstly, children take around 7 hours per day to study in school in 12 perpetual years and this is a place where children study and socialize. Secondly, good education and friendly studying environment can also help children achieve success in their future, regardless of their socio-economic background. Therefore, education system all over the world should be improved to develop children's potentials.

In conclusion, it seems to me that children have to be brought up in the best environment because they deserve the best things we have. And the relationship between parents and school is a key to shape children's future.