Writing Feedback / TOEFL- studnets prefer home-schooling rather than trditional schools [3]

There has been an argument regarding the issue that students are more likely willing to take home-schooling instead of studying at conventional schools in the future. Some people say that it has become prevalent studying at home with parents because children feel comfortable with home-schooling system. However, I think that students will still prefer to go to school. In this essay, I will present two reasons.

To start with, traditional school gives opportunities for students to build up social skills. In general, schools not only have educational purpose, but also for contributing the children's social development. By spending time together in class, students will learn how to deal with problems and lessen conflicts among them. In addition, they will have more chance to meet and broaden their social relationship with people with different background and perspective. In case of South Korea, students normally go through twelve years of school system. During this long time, students obtain how to live in harmony with others and become good member of society.

On top of that, students can not control themselves while nobody is watching. Generally speaking, young teenagers are reluctant to study and avoid hardships. Thus, they are easily distracted by other things such as televison or computer. However, if home-schooling is done with these technologic devices, they will definitely lose interest in education quickly. Thus, what if nobody is taking care and giving constant attention. So, it makes harder for parents to work on their business and will lead further problem with the relationship between children and parents. For example, I thought home-schooling is the best solution for me, this is because I thought I can use time efficiently and develop my knowledge futher. However, I found myself being lazy and giving up on my study no so far. Eventually, I had to go back to school.

I believe that traditional school system should be placed ahead of home-schooling. This is because school takes a great role in student's social aptitude, but also school can give constant care and lead students in right place.

Writing Feedback / TOEFL - Scientist are responsible for the negative impacts of their discoveries. [7]

There has been an argument regarding the issue that scientists are in charge of negative consequences of their discoveries. Some people say that they do not have to be responsible for their discoveries, since these discoveries has brought more advantages than disadvantages. However, from my perspective, I believe that scientists should take responsibility for their action and findings. In this essay, I will present two reasons to support my idea.

First of all, scientists can predict how their discoveries would impact on the society. In general, they are the one who had thought about its aftermath before they proclaimed their discoveries. In addition, they are experts in the field of area, they should have known its benefits and drawbacks. For example, Alberts Eistein, the most preeminent physician who contribute to create atomic bombs led millions of people to suffer and die from its severe nuclear radiation. Furthermore, atomic bombs has been used as a big threat to mankind and still many people are afraid of its use. People would not worry about nuclear bomb if Einstein was considerate about creating atomic bombs. Although he is considered as a contributor ending the second World War earlier, he should be responsible for his invention.

Second of all, scientist are the only one who can prevent social problems in the future. They should make correct decisions based on morality. Generally speaking, scientists should deeply deem about its use. Advanced technology should be used for positive and correct form. However, it can be used wrongly as well. For instance, Google recently announced that they made Google Glass which is innovative device that would improve people's life. However, its invention is on the brink of privacy issue. one of its features is that users can record everything what they see within their sight. This might sound interesting, but can be used for bad purposes such as recording people's appearance and this invade one's privacy. once it is prevalent among people, it would cause a lot of problems further. Therefore, the scientists should be moral and aware of their invention.

In conclusion, scientist must be considerate about their discoveries. They know consequence how their findings will change the world and are responsible for further problems in the future.