Ammapurnamasari
May 24, 2014
Writing Feedback / The table subordinate to Somecoutry's people [6]
Billion thanks dumi. I hope you always want to comment my writing.
Billion thanks dumi. I hope you always want to comment my writing.
Ammapurnamasari
May 16, 2014
Writing Feedback / The table subordinate to Somecoutry's people [6]
Thank you very much Dumi for your comments on my writing. I'm new comer in EF, so may be I still do not understand about that. But thanks for remember me 😄👍
Thank you very much Dumi for your comments on my writing. I'm new comer in EF, so may be I still do not understand about that. But thanks for remember me 😄👍
Ammapurnamasari
May 15, 2014
Writing Feedback / The table subordinate to Somecoutry's people [6]
The table subordinate to demonstrate the process of Somecoutry's people to expended their money during 2001-2006.
It can be clearly seen that in 2001, persons of Somecoutry spent their money to bonds were about $100 billions and stock were about $210 billions. Between 2002 and 2003, excalation of stocks were not much about $126 billions until $227 billions. However, in same year, bonds were increasing about $123 billions until $157 billions. In 2004, stocks were growing faster than 2003 about $289 billions and more faster in 2005 and 2006 were about $297 billions until $311 billions. While bonds also increased annually, even though were not growing faster same as stocks. In 2004, bonds increased about $162 billions, in 2005 was about $179 billions, and in 2006 was $188 billions.
Conclution, bonds and stocks were increasing every year during 2001-2006.
The table subordinate to demonstrate the process of Somecoutry's people to expended their money during 2001-2006.
It can be clearly seen that in 2001, persons of Somecoutry spent their money to bonds were about $100 billions and stock were about $210 billions. Between 2002 and 2003, excalation of stocks were not much about $126 billions until $227 billions. However, in same year, bonds were increasing about $123 billions until $157 billions. In 2004, stocks were growing faster than 2003 about $289 billions and more faster in 2005 and 2006 were about $297 billions until $311 billions. While bonds also increased annually, even though were not growing faster same as stocks. In 2004, bonds increased about $162 billions, in 2005 was about $179 billions, and in 2006 was $188 billions.
Conclution, bonds and stocks were increasing every year during 2001-2006.
Ammapurnamasari
May 7, 2014
Writing Feedback / IELTS: Administrations often invest in the art such as music and theater. [8]
government should spent of money to necessary that more important like public service.
Government should spend money for necessary that more important like public services than spend money for support arts activities.
government should spent of money to necessary that more important like public service.
Government should spend money for necessary that more important like public services than spend money for support arts activities.
Ammapurnamasari
May 7, 2014
Writing Feedback / IELTS: Government investment in the arts to make better their country [5]
such as highway, park city, traffic light, halte andanymore.
Such as highway, city park, traffic light and halt.
such as highway, park city, traffic light, halte and
Such as highway, city park, traffic light and halt.
Ammapurnamasari
May 6, 2014
Writing Feedback / Many charities can society get if government investment money in arts activities [5]
Thank you mizu
Are my mistakes just that?
Do I out of topic?
Thank you mizu
Are my mistakes just that?
Do I out of topic?
Ammapurnamasari
May 6, 2014
Writing Feedback / Many charities can society get if government investment money in arts activities [5]
Government investment in the arts, such as music and theater is waste of money. Government must invest this money in public services. Do you agree or disagree?
These days, we always see if government usually invest money in some arts activities, such as music and theater. Some people believe if those things are wasting of government's money. Some other people, include me is disagree with those things. I think many advantages for society if government invest money in arts activities, such as for culture education.
From the one side, as we know that arts are very connecting with culture education. Many performances in arts that government always makes for society are culture theme, such as Jakarta Fair in Jakarta. Government of Jakarta always makes activities seems like that because they want to keep their own culture and remain that for their next generation. Besides that, people who come from many regionals in Indonesia are also can learn about Jakarta's culture as known as Betawi and they are very enjoy it. I think it has many charities for society.
However, from the other side, some people believe if government investment money in arts is waste of money and prefer to invest that money to public services. But I think invest in public services, such as for high way or traffic lamp are also waste of money if the society can protect them. Many people in our country always break the public services if they have conflict with the government.
To sum up, I disagree with that statement. Many charities can society get if government investment money in arts activities. People can perpetuate their culture and give it to their generation as heritages. And I think it is the best investment for government for their society.
Government investment in the arts, such as music and theater is waste of money. Government must invest this money in public services. Do you agree or disagree?
These days, we always see if government usually invest money in some arts activities, such as music and theater. Some people believe if those things are wasting of government's money. Some other people, include me is disagree with those things. I think many advantages for society if government invest money in arts activities, such as for culture education.
From the one side, as we know that arts are very connecting with culture education. Many performances in arts that government always makes for society are culture theme, such as Jakarta Fair in Jakarta. Government of Jakarta always makes activities seems like that because they want to keep their own culture and remain that for their next generation. Besides that, people who come from many regionals in Indonesia are also can learn about Jakarta's culture as known as Betawi and they are very enjoy it. I think it has many charities for society.
However, from the other side, some people believe if government investment money in arts is waste of money and prefer to invest that money to public services. But I think invest in public services, such as for high way or traffic lamp are also waste of money if the society can protect them. Many people in our country always break the public services if they have conflict with the government.
To sum up, I disagree with that statement. Many charities can society get if government investment money in arts activities. People can perpetuate their culture and give it to their generation as heritages. And I think it is the best investment for government for their society.
