hoanghcmup
May 25, 2014
hoanghcmup
May 25, 2014
Undergraduate / Describe an important decision that you made - ENGLISH TEACHER [4]
I would like to describe my decision to my university - University of Pedagogy. Almost everyone may think that this will be another story about argument between children and their parents about following their dreams. But you may feel surprise when you finish reading my story.
I am a girl with plenty of abilities but nothing is my strength. The girl like me can never stay in a mood for a long time. I easily get bored when doing one thing for a long time. I like changes and new things.
In secondary school, I took part in The Good Students completion in Biology. However, I chose Physics to study at Le Quy Don high school for the gifted. But I turned to study Literature because my Literature teacher who was also my homeroom teacher was so great, which caused me to study Literature quite well, that I had dreamed of being a Literature teacher.
And that is how the story began. I wanted to be a literature teacher while my dad wanted me to be a teacher of English. I wonder if I should follow my dream or fulfill my dad's wish. I asked my homeroom teacher for advice. She said "Following your dream is good but it would be better if you can fulfill your parents' wish. Furthermore, you are also good at English". I was quite good at both English and Literature. It took my times to think of which career I should have in the future. Also, my father didn't make any pressure on my choice.
At the end, I took the entrance exam to be a teacher of English. This has made a lot of change and challenge in my life. I was quite surprise when knowing the news that I had won a place at University of Pedagogy in teacher of English. On the first day at school, I was overwhelmed because almost my classmates came from high school for the gifted in English and most of them have had at least one certificate in English such as Olympic, The Good Students competition, TOIEC, IELTS and etc. They are so excellent, which is a big challenge for me. What I need to do now is study twice as much as they do. My father's wish now isn't only his anymore. I have stopped liking English and started to love it. I also love my class now. My classmates are very nice. They weren't serious students as I expected. They know how to balance the time between studying and playing. Moreover, I have found my close friends here. At this time, I feel very happy and satisfied.
This decision brings me a lot of wonderful things, doesn't it?
I'm trying to improve my writing skill, so i will appreciate all your help!
Zim
I would like to describe my decision to my university - University of Pedagogy. Almost everyone may think that this will be another story about argument between children and their parents about following their dreams. But you may feel surprise when you finish reading my story.
I am a girl with plenty of abilities but nothing is my strength. The girl like me can never stay in a mood for a long time. I easily get bored when doing one thing for a long time. I like changes and new things.
In secondary school, I took part in The Good Students completion in Biology. However, I chose Physics to study at Le Quy Don high school for the gifted. But I turned to study Literature because my Literature teacher who was also my homeroom teacher was so great, which caused me to study Literature quite well, that I had dreamed of being a Literature teacher.
And that is how the story began. I wanted to be a literature teacher while my dad wanted me to be a teacher of English. I wonder if I should follow my dream or fulfill my dad's wish. I asked my homeroom teacher for advice. She said "Following your dream is good but it would be better if you can fulfill your parents' wish. Furthermore, you are also good at English". I was quite good at both English and Literature. It took my times to think of which career I should have in the future. Also, my father didn't make any pressure on my choice.
At the end, I took the entrance exam to be a teacher of English. This has made a lot of change and challenge in my life. I was quite surprise when knowing the news that I had won a place at University of Pedagogy in teacher of English. On the first day at school, I was overwhelmed because almost my classmates came from high school for the gifted in English and most of them have had at least one certificate in English such as Olympic, The Good Students competition, TOIEC, IELTS and etc. They are so excellent, which is a big challenge for me. What I need to do now is study twice as much as they do. My father's wish now isn't only his anymore. I have stopped liking English and started to love it. I also love my class now. My classmates are very nice. They weren't serious students as I expected. They know how to balance the time between studying and playing. Moreover, I have found my close friends here. At this time, I feel very happy and satisfied.
This decision brings me a lot of wonderful things, doesn't it?
I'm trying to improve my writing skill, so i will appreciate all your help!
Zim
hoanghcmup
May 25, 2014
Writing Feedback / Story about why the dog 'Jaw' was sold by the owner [4]
He lived...
he depressed and felt lonely...
he would not..
he got out of...
Jaw was... and always played... Stanley had bought
Stanley loved...
At that time, Jaw had grown a lot bigger than the first day Stanley bought him.
Stanley cuddling...
he kept barking all night, which caused BoBo to cry
He advertised Jaw on the newspaper to sell for getting rid of Jaw as soon as possible.
grammar... Well, it seems that you do need to pay attention to tense. The tenses need to be more unique.
Yes, of course.
Thank you for reading my correction. I hope that it will be helpful.
he was not...
He live alone in a condominium
He lived...
he felt lonely and depress at times.
he depressed and felt lonely...
he won't felt lonely any more
he would not..
he walk out the shop.
he got out of...
Jaw is pretty playful and always play with the ball that Stanley bought.
Jaw was... and always played... Stanley had bought
Stanley love to be with Jaw together
Stanley loved...
At that time, Jaw grew a lot bigger that it was when Stanley bought him.
At that time, Jaw had grown a lot bigger than the first day Stanley bought him.
Stanley cuddle the baby
Stanley cuddling...
he keep barking and barking all night and causes Bobo to cry.
he kept barking all night, which caused BoBo to cry
He went to the newspaper office to advertised Jaw and hoped to sell Jaw as soon as possible.
He advertised Jaw on the newspaper to sell for getting rid of Jaw as soon as possible.
Please correct my grammer or my tenses. :)
grammar... Well, it seems that you do need to pay attention to tense. The tenses need to be more unique.
One quick question: can I use 'he' to indicate my animal-Jaw??
Yes, of course.
Thank you for reading my correction. I hope that it will be helpful.
he isn't satisfied about the dog he found there
he was not...
hoanghcmup
May 25, 2014
Undergraduate / How my family shaped who I am today [3]
My family has shaped the person I am today.
My family is one of the most important factors that shape my personality today.
My family has shaped the person I am today.
My family is one of the most important factors that shape my personality today.
hoanghcmup
May 25, 2014
Scholarship / Nha Trang - Describe your hometown [4]
I was born in Nha Trang - one of 29 most beautiful bays in the world. Nha Trang is famous for many things. The first thing anyone who has chance to visit Nha Trang always mentions is its beach. The beach is wonderful with sunlight and a line of coconut grown along the beach. It is great to spend time lying on the beach watching sun rising in the morning and having dinner on the sand in the evening. Moreover, there are plenty of activities for you to join. Swimming and diving are the most popular sports in Nha Trang. At night, you may see some performances concluding traditional and modern one. Besides the beach, there are plenty of places you may want to take a visit such as Vinpearl land, Po Nagar Cham Towers, 100 Eggs Mud Bath and many big and small islands. If you are tired of going from places to places, you can take a rest and enjoy our traditional foods and fresh seafood in many restaurants located along the beach or in Dam market. Nha Trang is not only famous for places and foods but also well known for the local people. Almost people in here are very nice and friendly. They are willing to help whenever you get lost or need any help. Security is not a big problem here because there are polices patrolling even though you may not see them doing. Besides the strength of tourism, Nha Trang is also good in fishing industry. Nha Trang has exported seafood to many countries in the world such as USA, Korean, Japan, and etc. To be a NT-er, I am very proud of my city and I will be very happy if you like Nha Trang and join hands with me to build a better Nha Trang.
I'm trying to improve my writing skill, so i will appreciate all your help!
Zim
I was born in Nha Trang - one of 29 most beautiful bays in the world. Nha Trang is famous for many things. The first thing anyone who has chance to visit Nha Trang always mentions is its beach. The beach is wonderful with sunlight and a line of coconut grown along the beach. It is great to spend time lying on the beach watching sun rising in the morning and having dinner on the sand in the evening. Moreover, there are plenty of activities for you to join. Swimming and diving are the most popular sports in Nha Trang. At night, you may see some performances concluding traditional and modern one. Besides the beach, there are plenty of places you may want to take a visit such as Vinpearl land, Po Nagar Cham Towers, 100 Eggs Mud Bath and many big and small islands. If you are tired of going from places to places, you can take a rest and enjoy our traditional foods and fresh seafood in many restaurants located along the beach or in Dam market. Nha Trang is not only famous for places and foods but also well known for the local people. Almost people in here are very nice and friendly. They are willing to help whenever you get lost or need any help. Security is not a big problem here because there are polices patrolling even though you may not see them doing. Besides the strength of tourism, Nha Trang is also good in fishing industry. Nha Trang has exported seafood to many countries in the world such as USA, Korean, Japan, and etc. To be a NT-er, I am very proud of my city and I will be very happy if you like Nha Trang and join hands with me to build a better Nha Trang.
I'm trying to improve my writing skill, so i will appreciate all your help!
Zim