Writing Feedback / Parents - the main factor effect personality on person; Fatherhood vs motherhood [4]

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Topic: The idea that women are solely responsible for deciding whether or not to have babies leads on to the idea that they are also responsible for bringing the children up.

Parents were the main factor effect personality of a person. However, some people think that women are solely responsible for deciding whether or not to have babies lead on to the idea that they are also responsible for bringing the children up. Personally, I think this idea is totally wrong because the role of father must be important as much as role of mother.

"Bringing the children up" phrases mean that parents have to support for children money or assert, but also can be understand that parents have responsibilities and duties to support for their children motion and teaching them to be successful in the future.

Now a day, in the family, the role of man and woman are equal. So, taking care of children is the responsibility of both father and mother. Father must share house chore with mother after working such as: taking more time play with kids, read to them, helping them to do the homework and giving them some wisdoms for their life. That will become the base to help children growth up and the distant between father and kids will shorter. Moreover, if the children have a good supporting from parents, they will become stronger to face with any situation.

In sum up, father is one of important person for each family. Therefore, they must show their role to support for each member in their family. Maybe it hard to complete, but we need to try because it is a important responsibility and duties.

Writing Feedback / pros and cons when children were learned foreign language in primary shool [4]

In the modern day, the society develops so fast with a lot of social networks to make people closer. So, communicating by foreign language was become the important factor to make the transnational relationship. That's the reason why many children to being learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Personally, I think this issue has advantages and also disadvantages.

That will have a lot of advantages when children were learning foreign language while they were a kid. Because of the acumen of kid they will learn easier than the teenager. Moreover, their brain will acquire foreign language, so that make them can learn it clearly and professionally.

However, there are also have a lot of disadvantage when children learn other language in primary school. They are still too young, so learning other language may be not a necessary skill. If they were learned foreign language, they may forget mother language because they haven't use mother language completely. Besides, they will live under of pressure because they have to learn two languages at the same time. Meanwhile, in the secondary school, they have older and their brain was more developed, so they can have the ability to learn other languages because they had understand clearly mother language.

In sum up, I think that learning foreign language at primary school have more disadvantages than advantages. Thus, parents should think carefully before they decide to take children to learn other language when they have been too young.

Writing Feedback / Community service in high school has many benefits [3]

Life skill is one of important factor to support for students. Therefore, some people think that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programs to help student gaining life skill and knowledge, and there are a lot of high schools performing some programs like that. Personally, I think that these programs are very good because it help student have opportunity to se and to experience a lot aspects of life.

Instead of watching TV or playing games on the computer at home,student will accumulate a lot of useful experiences and knowledge from some programs like: working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children. By some activity like that, student will become creative and active people. They already known how to communicate and make the relationship with other people. Especially, in the future, some experiences from participating in community organizations will be very valuable because it is one of highlight point in CV when student want to apply for the job.

Beside, taking part in unpaid community service to help student having a healthy life because have to work regularly, and learning a lot of useful knowledge from partner. Mostly, people who work for community are very kind of, so when student work with some people like that they will become a good person by influence from their partners. By this way, society decreasing criminal rate at the age of teenager.

To sum up, that will be a good idea for compelling unpaid community service in high school. If these programs are did well, student can learn a lot of from them, so they will improve their life skill and their concept of life too.

Writing Feedback / Number of languages in the world and its impact on global safety [4]

There are a lot of different countries on the world, so that lead to have many different cultures and diverse languages. However, every year, several languages die out. Some people think that would be bad because the human will lose the diversity of culture by this problem. In contrast, others opinions argue that would be good if there are fewer languages in the world. Personally, I totally agree with this idea by three reasons below.

The first reason is when the world just has few languages that will make people closer because they can easily communicate together. In addition, some countries can cut down the cost and time to foreign language education, and they can use money for the other problem like: helping poor people or enhancing quality of living.

Secondly, because of barrier language, leading to be different culture and civilization between many countries in the world, but now they can exchange together because it will be less than barrier language. That is absolutely a good opportunity for some developing countries because they can easily learn knowledge from developed countries, and of course quality of living will be increase quicker.

Thirdly, the world will avoid a lot of conflicts and discrimination when they use less language. As you know there are a lot of arguments were happening between many countries with different culture and language. By the way, I think that the peace will be kept safety if people just use fewer languages.

In short, base on some reasons above, I strongly agree to have fewer languages on the world because that have a lot of advantages for people

Writing Feedback / Imprisonment trend among five different countries - bar graph [5]

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Some interesting facts concerning the figures for imprisonment in five countries between 1930 and 1980 are revealed in the bar graph.
In general, Unite States and Canada had the higher prisoners than others. In1930, with over 120000 prisoners, although Canada had the highest of the number of prisoners, this figure was significantly decreased until 1980. In contract, the number of imprisonment in United State was smaller than Canada in 1930, but it had some fluctuation, and then became the highest number in 1980 by nearly 140000 prisoners. Following is Great Britain, they just had about 30000 prisoners in 1930 that is the at least number, and then they had the dramatic breakthrough from 1940 to 1980 with over 85000 prisoners. Australia and New Zealand fluctuate slightly between 1930 and 1980. The number of imprisonment in Australia showed an upward trend, whereas the number of imprisonment in New Zealand had a downward trend.

In conclusion, after a general looking this bar graph, we can see that United States , Great Britain and Australia was an increased the number of imprisonment, that mean the criminal in this countries tend to gain. In contract, others countries like Canada and New Zealand tend to significantly decrease.

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Writing Feedback / The line graph: Migration Statistics in UK [3]

Some interesting facts concerning about immigration, emigration and net immigration in UK from 1999 to 2008 were illustrated by this line graph above.

Overview, there were some fluctuations for each of them, but both immigration rate and emigration rate tend to increase over the period shown.
The proportion which is the number of immigration was higher than the others. From 1999 to 2003 this rate was a slightly raised, and before reaching the highest point at 600000 peoples in 2006, this rate fluctuated widely from 2003 to 2005, and it continued fluctuating until 2008

Moving to the second highest proportion, the number of people who emigrated was a significantly increased from 1999 to 2005 by 400000 peoples. In 2006, this rate decreased suddenly, but then it continued having an upward trend from 2007 to 2008.

Finally, let's look at the number of net immigration in UK, this rate peaked at almost 250000 people in 2004 and 2007 though having some slightly fluctuation.

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