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Name: Bagus Prabowo Aji
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bagusprabowoaji   
Jun 23, 2014
Writing Feedback / College graduates find hard to get good jobs [5]

to: DUMI (Moderator)
actually, I'm considering to take IBT TOEFL in the end of this year.
however, I'm not confidence in facing writing section.
could you give me some suggestion
thank you. I do appreciate your help

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Bagus Prabowo Aji
bagusprabowoaji   
Jun 19, 2014
Writing Feedback / College graduates find hard to get good jobs [5]

Dear my friends in essayforum, Could you please check my writing. I do appreciate your help[/b]

In today's fierce competition, the labor market has become more challenging for recent college graduates. Some people believe that, the rising of college grad unemployment due to lack of employment opportunities. Companies as jobs providers do not need to recruit more workers due to the advance of technology. They believe that, robots, automation, and software can replace people in finishing the job. Moreover, the improving of industrial robotics to automated services is behind the sluggish employment growth of the last 10 to 15 years. This rapid technological change is believed will decrease job opportunity. For example in manufacturing field, robots play important role in installing parts of product. Moreover, robots have ability to solve some jobs in which people have limitations in doing it. Robot does not need a rest during 24 hour working process. In addition, according company perspective, hiring robot means reducing cost such as wage, insurance and health cost. The conditions make companies reducing job opportunity which affect the increasing of college grads unemployment.

Beside that condition, student's mindset about getting job after finishing the study also become the reason of the difficulty in finding jobs. Almost college grads think about how to get good jobs soon as graduate from university. This condition makes tight competition in getting job, because the more college grads the more competitor that should be faced to fill job vacancy. Students must change their mindset from being employee becoming an employer. It means they should think about how to be good entrepreneur, so that they can make more jobs for another bachelor.

On the other hand, university as producer in creating bachelors does not equip students with entrepreneurial skill. University tends to overemphasize about theoretical lesson. Due to the condition, students become too busy in pursuing achievement and forget to prepare other skills. In addition, university should support the students by giving communication and interpersonal skills that will be useful for getting their future jobs. For instance, a survey by the Workforce Solutions Group at St. Louis Community College found that more than 60 percent of employers said applicants lack "communication and interpersonal skills". Many managers also said that today's applicants can't think critically and creatively, solve problems or write well. Furthermore, Polity does not pay attention about job opportunity in its country, so employment and workforce are out of balance. Actually by creating good labor policy, government can prevent the high unemployment condition on its nation. The state can force companies residing in its territory, to provide more job opportunity in order to accommodate the rising college grads.

In conclusion, college graduate unemployment is a serious problem, therefore good cooperation among Industry, Universities and Government are expected to be able to overcome it.
bagusprabowoaji   
Jun 19, 2014
Writing Feedback / Distance learning as a new trend in education [NEW]

In today's advanced technology world, students have option to choose whether they want learning in distance by using computer or attending traditional school. Each alternative has advantages and disadvantages. In my views, learning through computer or internet can be more effective than the traditional ones.

Since advanced technology overwhelm world, society is getting closer with computer. People tend to use computer or mobile device to interact with others. This condition can be used to change the way of people in getting education. Previously, students get some course by attending school class. They meet the teacher and get some explanation about materials directly. However, in some case it will be difficult to be performed. For example, when storm or extreme climate changes happen, students are reluctant going to school. This condition will affect education process. Moreover, pupils can leg the course or lose their time to study. By using computer technology, learning process still can be done through distance such as at home. This will eliminate an obstacle which sometimes facing the students in completing their study.

The using of computer technology also increases numbers of students. Recently, many schools or universities offer online course to the students, it's called MOOC (Massive Open Online Course). By using MOOC, students coming around the world can take course provided by college that they desire. For example, I enroll MOOC provided by University of California Berkeley since a year ago through edx There are many learners coming from different countries joining this course. We get explanation about the lesson by watching videos provided by the professor. Furthermore, we conduct some task and examination to obtain a certificate of completion.

Distance learning give opportunity for the students and lecturers to conduct other activities or project. In my country, some of students and lecturers have their own business that must be completed during education process. For example, students having foods business should stay in their shop to service customer, so that they can gain money to pay the school. Lectures should conduct some research to full fill their competency in making journals and books. This condition cannot be done if they have to attend class like traditional school. On the other hand, by performing distance learning they will have chance to finish their activities at the same time.

In conclusion, distance learning by using computer can be a solution for people to gain knowledge in more effective way. It also can help the students and lecture to do some tasks simultaneously and create more opportunity for students in different places in getting course from the best college.
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