EyadBosy
Aug 4, 2014
Undergraduate / 'NOT YET'; any experience or accomplishment that defines me? (College Entrance Essay) [3]
Generally speaking I think you have to mention your own story, do you attend any workshops regarding writing your statement of purpose, I am sorry, I think you are out of scope, can you search you tube for videos on how to write an essay? I am talking about the contents, do you got my point? your ability to write is perfect but what to write is the issue.
If we look to the topic, may I suggest these corrections:
Have you ever wondered why people write essays? From my experience, I have been writing essays since I was in first grade. As I got older, however, the essay questions became harder; the essays appeared longer. Gone were the cute questions easily answerable by a yes or a no and the meaningless essay only your six-year-old self can write and get away with it. (I cannot understand what you mean)
I can never forget the fact when I first wrote a proper essay that I was proud of. For the first time, I garnered full marks and a stamp my little self always dreamed of having. Looking back, I realized a deeper reason of my pride. If one compares that essay to the essays I did in first grade, one can see a lot of differences. The former was full in the sense that it had more meaning and understanding than the latter. Like me, it "grew up" had grown up and became more mature.
Generally speaking I think you have to mention your own story, do you attend any workshops regarding writing your statement of purpose, I am sorry, I think you are out of scope, can you search you tube for videos on how to write an essay? I am talking about the contents, do you got my point? your ability to write is perfect but what to write is the issue.
If we look to the topic, may I suggest these corrections:
Have you ever wondered why people write essays? From my experience, I have been writing essays since I was in first grade. As I got older, however, the essay questions became harder; the essays appeared longer. Gone were the cute questions easily answerable by a yes or a no and the meaningless essay only your six-year-old self can write and get away with it. (I cannot understand what you mean)
I can never forget the fact when I first wrote a proper essay that I was proud of. For the first time, I garnered full marks and a stamp my little self always dreamed of having. Looking back, I realized a deeper reason of my pride. If one compares that essay to the essays I did in first grade, one can see a lot of differences. The former was full in the sense that it had more meaning and understanding than the latter. Like me, it "grew up" had grown up and became more mature.