wirawiri
Oct 2, 2014
wirawiri
Sep 24, 2014
Writing Feedback / 'health is a primary need' - alternative forms of medicine [8]
correction :
I agree with the statement. Using alternative forms of medicine is harmful and there is no guarantee that the method will be effective, or sometimes it will be even worse. Misuse of using alternative forms of medicine can cause a death or serious illness
Lack of medical knowledge may be one of several factors affecting this trend. Not all of the people understand about the use of medicine, and sometimes they just take medications based upon referrals from other people. They do not even know what the effects of the alternative medicine are. This bad habit is increasing in non-educated society where people live without any medical facilities or drugstore. Another factor is the cost of the medicine. Lower income people buy alternative medicines because that is what they can afford.
However, the need for adequate healthcare is unquestionable, people will do everything to be healthy and heal their illnesses. This situation is what drives people to see either a doctor or alternative healthcare doctor. If they don't have money for a real doctor, then they don't have money for real medicines either. So they make the choice to use alternatives instead.
In this case, to avoid the use of alternative forms of medicine needs a professional help, like doctors or medical researches, to give advices to the society. Besides, government in each country, especially in developing countries, should build a better medical facilities which is less-cost and easy-to-get. By this way, people will get the more knowledge and also be more educated about medicine, even though the last decision is theirs.
The main point is ; health is a primary need. The people will not think twice about which is proper, or which is not. They just want to get health whatever it is. Going with the alternative medicine is not all wrong, but it has many risks. Ineffective and dangerous method are some of the bad effects of it, So people need to be more careful to choose the alternative forms of medicine. at worst, it can cause a death. the 'real medicine' still could be the first choice to get appropriate healthcare, so just let the professional and doctors hand in it.
correction :
I agree with the statement. Using alternative forms of medicine is harmful and there is no guarantee that the method will be effective, or sometimes it will be even worse. Misuse of using alternative forms of medicine can cause a death or serious illness
Lack of medical knowledge may be one of several factors affecting this trend. Not all of the people understand about the use of medicine, and sometimes they just take medications based upon referrals from other people. They do not even know what the effects of the alternative medicine are. This bad habit is increasing in non-educated society where people live without any medical facilities or drugstore. Another factor is the cost of the medicine. Lower income people buy alternative medicines because that is what they can afford.
However, the need for adequate healthcare is unquestionable, people will do everything to be healthy and heal their illnesses. This situation is what drives people to see either a doctor or alternative healthcare doctor. If they don't have money for a real doctor, then they don't have money for real medicines either. So they make the choice to use alternatives instead.
In this case, to avoid the use of alternative forms of medicine needs a professional help, like doctors or medical researches, to give advices to the society. Besides, government in each country, especially in developing countries, should build a better medical facilities which is less-cost and easy-to-get. By this way, people will get the more knowledge and also be more educated about medicine, even though the last decision is theirs.
The main point is ; health is a primary need. The people will not think twice about which is proper, or which is not. They just want to get health whatever it is. Going with the alternative medicine is not all wrong, but it has many risks. Ineffective and dangerous method are some of the bad effects of it, So people need to be more careful to choose the alternative forms of medicine. at worst, it can cause a death. the 'real medicine' still could be the first choice to get appropriate healthcare, so just let the professional and doctors hand in it.
wirawiri
Sep 23, 2014
Writing Feedback / 'health is a primary need' - alternative forms of medicine [8]
thank you very much...
thank you very much...
wirawiri
Sep 23, 2014
Writing Feedback / 'health is a primary need' - alternative forms of medicine [8]
statement :
Currently there is a trend towards the use of alternative forms of medicine. However, at best these methods are ineffective, and at worst they may be dangerous.
To what extent do you agree with this statement.
I agree with the statement. Using alternative forms of medicine is harmful and there is no guarantee that the method will be effective, or sometimes it will be even worse. Malfuntion of using alternative forms of medicine can cause a death or serious illness.
Lack of medical knowledge maybe one of several factors of this trend. Not all of the people understand about the use of medicine, and sometimes they take that way just as what they hear from everybody else. They do not even know what the effects of the alternative medicine are. This bad habit is increasing in non-educated society where people live without any medical facilities or drugstore properly. Another factor is the expense of the medicine. Example, middle-low society that has limited money cannot afford the medicine they need, so they will deal with the alternative medicine which tends to be cheaper.
However, the need of health is unquestionable, people will do everything to be healthy and healedfrom their kinds of sick. This situation will drive the people to say "no matter what", either doctor or witch doctor is the same. If they have money, they will go with medicine, but on the contrary, if they have no money, they will go with the alternative medicine. That is the choice that poor people should make.
In this case, to avoid the use of alternative forms of medicine needs a professional help, like doctors or medical researches, to give advices to the society. Besides, government in each country, especially in developing countries, should build a better medical facilities which is less-cost and easy-to-get.
The mainpoint is ; health is a primary need. The people will not think twice about which is proper, or which is not. They just want to get health whatever it is. Going with the alternative medicine is not all wrong, but it has many risks. Ineffective and dangerous method are some of the bad effects of it, So people need to be more careful.
statement :
Currently there is a trend towards the use of alternative forms of medicine. However, at best these methods are ineffective, and at worst they may be dangerous.
To what extent do you agree with this statement.
I agree with the statement. Using alternative forms of medicine is harmful and there is no guarantee that the method will be effective, or sometimes it will be even worse. Malfuntion of using alternative forms of medicine can cause a death or serious illness.
Lack of medical knowledge maybe one of several factors of this trend. Not all of the people understand about the use of medicine, and sometimes they take that way just as what they hear from everybody else. They do not even know what the effects of the alternative medicine are. This bad habit is increasing in non-educated society where people live without any medical facilities or drugstore properly. Another factor is the expense of the medicine. Example, middle-low society that has limited money cannot afford the medicine they need, so they will deal with the alternative medicine which tends to be cheaper.
However, the need of health is unquestionable, people will do everything to be healthy and healedfrom their kinds of sick. This situation will drive the people to say "no matter what", either doctor or witch doctor is the same. If they have money, they will go with medicine, but on the contrary, if they have no money, they will go with the alternative medicine. That is the choice that poor people should make.
In this case, to avoid the use of alternative forms of medicine needs a professional help, like doctors or medical researches, to give advices to the society. Besides, government in each country, especially in developing countries, should build a better medical facilities which is less-cost and easy-to-get.
The mainpoint is ; health is a primary need. The people will not think twice about which is proper, or which is not. They just want to get health whatever it is. Going with the alternative medicine is not all wrong, but it has many risks. Ineffective and dangerous method are some of the bad effects of it, So people need to be more careful.
wirawiri
Sep 22, 2014
Writing Feedback / Ielts: key factors for being successful. [6]
It is certainly true that some people claim hard working and determination are the only ways to get successful in the life, while others argue that there are other factors that are more critical when it comes to achieving success. My opinion is more practical and worthy of being paid attention and it will be known during the scope of my essay.
It is certainly true that some people claim hard work and determination are the keys to get success in the life. Some groups argue that there are other critical factors in achieving success. My opinion is more practical and worthy to be considered. It will be discussed in my essay.
it is just my opinion for the introduction.
It is certainly true that some people claim hard working and determination are the only ways to get successful in the life, while others argue that there are other factors that are more critical when it comes to achieving success. My opinion is more practical and worthy of being paid attention and it will be known during the scope of my essay.
It is certainly true that some people claim hard work and determination are the keys to get success in the life. Some groups argue that there are other critical factors in achieving success. My opinion is more practical and worthy to be considered. It will be discussed in my essay.
it is just my opinion for the introduction.
wirawiri
Sep 22, 2014
Writing Feedback / Parenting training at school days [IELTS] [Essay2] [6]
hii..
in paragraph 1. you should put your opinion about agree or disagree.
e.g : i entirely agree with the statement... or i disagree with the statement,
that's my opinion. but your idea is not bad.
hii..
in paragraph 1. you should put your opinion about agree or disagree.
e.g : i entirely agree with the statement... or i disagree with the statement,
that's my opinion. but your idea is not bad.
wirawiri
Sep 15, 2014
Writing Feedback / One of the dangerous threat to our planet is climate change - ielts task 2 [2]
Tittle : climate change is now accepted threat to our planet, but there is not enough political action to control excessive consumerism and pollution. Do you agree
I agree with the opinion of the tittle. One of the dangerous threat to our planet is climate change. Several causes of this threat are excessive consumerism and pollution. Political action is needed to control this situation. Some countries around the world never pay more attention about what things cause the climate change and what effects will occur.
The economic growth are more important than the damage of the nature. The need of modern lifestyle has made the industry grow uncontrolled. It also has given a big pressure to the government in charge. These industrial activities give a bad effect for climate but in the other side they give the profit more to the country, as economic view, the business will be rising. Other causes, like cars, houses and any other kind of consumerism, also take part of this problem. This condition surely put the government in a hard-choice. The rules made by any political action was not strong enough to regulate this serious problem. Most of them think that the economic growth is absolutely most important than the condition of the environment.
As we realize that this condition will make new nature problem, for example ; global warming, rising sea levels and unpredictable weather patterns. It is impossible to control without government's helps or political actions. A country can rule and limit the number of industry, if the government takes part and keeps an eye of this case.
to protect our earth needs a political action made by the government and any involved parties. They should make the rule clear, limit the number of factory causing pollution and give a high tax for any kinds of consumerism. By this way, we will be able to reduce the climate changes problem.
Tittle : climate change is now accepted threat to our planet, but there is not enough political action to control excessive consumerism and pollution. Do you agree
I agree with the opinion of the tittle. One of the dangerous threat to our planet is climate change. Several causes of this threat are excessive consumerism and pollution. Political action is needed to control this situation. Some countries around the world never pay more attention about what things cause the climate change and what effects will occur.
The economic growth are more important than the damage of the nature. The need of modern lifestyle has made the industry grow uncontrolled. It also has given a big pressure to the government in charge. These industrial activities give a bad effect for climate but in the other side they give the profit more to the country, as economic view, the business will be rising. Other causes, like cars, houses and any other kind of consumerism, also take part of this problem. This condition surely put the government in a hard-choice. The rules made by any political action was not strong enough to regulate this serious problem. Most of them think that the economic growth is absolutely most important than the condition of the environment.
As we realize that this condition will make new nature problem, for example ; global warming, rising sea levels and unpredictable weather patterns. It is impossible to control without government's helps or political actions. A country can rule and limit the number of industry, if the government takes part and keeps an eye of this case.
to protect our earth needs a political action made by the government and any involved parties. They should make the rule clear, limit the number of factory causing pollution and give a high tax for any kinds of consumerism. By this way, we will be able to reduce the climate changes problem.